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PAAAnnIIIcccc, text needs to be corrected by someone... True smiles How often do you smile a day? Do you smile your consent when you have your favourite dish for lunch ? Do you wear a charming smile when you reciprocate (? need a better word) a compliment, or when you are speechless, but still want to say something without words?. Or maybe a sheepish smile when your glance meet the glance of someone you like? So many smiles a day. Smiling is healthy, smiling infects your environment and can mean more than many words. Undoubtedly, you should never forget to smile since there are people who subsist (better word?) on your smile. But is a smile always a smile? How often do we pretend to be all smiles and graces whilst at the same time being melancholic and sad? How often is a mile used to hide and protect our vulnerability? How often is the smile we receive just a mask hiding something like jealousy or hypocrisy? Nowadays society almost obliges us to be constantly happy, or at least to emanate an air of good humourdness, a feeling of good spirits and of infinite cheerfulness. A smile. A laugh. An exclamation. We have the urge to show our existence, to smile the pain and the doubts away, to captivate utterly everything in our range. Smile. Just smile. Never stop smiling. Always keep up the appearances. But is this the right track? Of course there is nothing to say against a sincere enchanting smile, but maybe there are also other values we should not become oblivious of. Such as silence and demurity. A sparkle of modesty, not to be confused with self-diffidence. For instance silence.

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PAAAnnIIIcccc, text needs to be corrected by someone...

True smiles

How often do you smile a day? Do you smile your consent (consent=permission, consent=satisfaction) when you have your favourite dish for lunch ? Do you wear a charming smile when you reciprocate (receive) a compliment?  Do you smile when you are speechless, but still want to speak without words?. Or maybe a sheepish smile when your glance (gaze?) meets the glance (gaze?) of someone you like? So many smiles a day. Smiling is healthy, smiling infects your environment and can mean more than many words. Undoubtedly, you should never forget to smile since there are people who subsist (thrive, feast, subsist isn't bad) on your smile.
But is a smile always a smile? How often do we pretend to be all smiles and graces whilst at the same time being melancholic and sad? How often is a mile used to hide and protect our vulnerability? How often is the smile we receive just a mask hiding something like jealousy or hypocrisy?
Nowadays, society almost obliges us to be constantly happy, or at least to emanate an air of good humourdness,. It demands feeling of good spirits and of infinite cheerfulness. A smile. A laugh. An exclamation. We have the urge to show our existence, to smile the pain and the doubts away, to captivate utterly everything in our range. Smile. Just smile. Never stop smiling. Always keep up the appearances. But is this the right track path? Of course there is nothing to say against wrong with a sincere, enchanting smile, but maybe there are also other values we should not become oblivious of ignore. Such as silence and demurity. A sparkle of modesty, not to be confused with self-diffidence. For instance silence Silence, for instance.

 

It's very good. A few of my corrections are word choices and some are just stylistic choices. Some are things I would change to make it sound more natural to an American's ear. Nice work!

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PAAAnnIIIcccc, text needs to be corrected by someone...

True smiles

How often do you smile a day? Do you smile your consent with pleasure/contentment when you have your favourite dish for lunch ? Do you wear a charming smile when you reciprocating/returning (? need a better word) a compliment, or when you are speechless, (drop the comma because of the comma with or) but still want to say something without words?. Or maybe a sheepish smile when your glance meets the glance of someone you like? So many smiles in a day. (growling grizzling groaning muttering whinging and frowning are great too!) Smiling is healthy, smiling infects your environment and can mean more than many words. Undoubtedly, you should never forget to smile since there are people who subsist/feed/depend/thrive (better word?) on your smile.
But is a smile always a smile? How often do we pretend to be all smiles and graces whilst at the same time being melancholic and sad? How often is a smile used to hide and protect our vulnerability? How often is the smile we receive just a mask hiding something like jealousy or hypocrisy?
Nowadays society almost (more than almost) obliges us to be constantly happy, or at least to emanate/exude an air of good humourdness, a feeling of good spirits and of infinite cheerfulness. A smile. A laugh. An exclamation. We have the urge to show our existence, to smile the pain and the doubts away, to captivate utterly everything in our range. Smile. Just smile. Never stop smiling. Always keep up the appearances. But is this the right track? Of course there is nothing to be said say against a sincere enchanting smile, but maybe there are also other values we should not neglect/ignore become oblivious of. Such as silence and circumspection/modesty/demureness demurenessity.(haha another invention - maybe it is thus in French?)  A sparkle of modesty, not to be confused with self-diffidence. For instance silence.

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PAAAnnIIIcccc, text needs to be corrected by someone...

True smiles

How often do you smile a day? Do you smile with pleasure when you have your favourite dish for lunch ? Do you wear a charming smile when you return a compliment, or when you are speechless, but still want to say something without words? Or maybe a sheepish smile when your eyes meet the glance of someone you like? So many smiles a day. You should never forget to smile. Smiling is healthy. Smiling is infectious and can mean more to someone than your words.

But is a smile always a smile? How often do we pretend to be all smiles and graces whilst at the same time being melancholic and sad? How often is a smile used to hide and protect our vulnerability? How often is the smile we receive just a mask hiding something like jealousy or hypocrisy?
Nowadays society almost obliges us to be constantly happy, or at least to emanate an air of good humour, a feeling of good spirits and of infinite cheerfulness. A smile. A laugh. An exclamation. We have the urge to show our existence, to smile the pain and the doubts away, to captivate utterly everything in our range.

Never stop smiling. Always keep up the appearances. But is this the right track? Of course there is nothing to say against a sincere enchanting smile, but maybe there are also other values we should not become oblivious of. Such as silence and demurity. A sparkle of modesty, not to be confused with self-diffidence. For instance silence.

Smile. Just smile.

 

(I love it! Well done!)

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I think 'reciprocate' is a really good word there.

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