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报告我的进步 开始我的‘减肥和练出更好的体形' 的任务九天后,下文是我的进步。做完了我的第一个Wii《My Fitness Coach》游戏的锻炼以后,我几乎走不动, 甚至走下楼梯很痛。 因此我不能做锻炼一周。今天我再开始锻炼。我刚刚做完了再一个锻炼,真的希望这次的锻炼不会让我没法正常动。虽然上个星期我不能锻炼,可是当然我努力吃健康饮食了。我开心地告诉大家我减掉了三磅。三磅不很多重量,如果能锻炼,肯定会减掉了更多的。尽管如此,三磅的减少依然是减重的。 9 days into my ’lose weight, tone up‘ mission here's what's happening. After my first work out on the Wii I couldn't barely walk for a week, just getting down the stairs was agony, so the daily work out didn't happen. But I started working out agan today.. Just finished another one, hopefully this time it wont put me out of commission for days. I did watch what I ate of course and I am pleased to report that I did lose 3lbs over the week. It's not huge, and not as much as I could have lost if I'd been able to work out, but it is something

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报告我的进步

开始我的‘减肥和练出更好的体形' 的任务九天后,下文是我的进步。(:)

    做完了我的第一个Wii《My Fitness Coach》游戏的锻炼以后,我几乎走不动(了), 甚至走(连)下楼梯(也)很痛。 因此我不能做锻炼一周(天天锻炼)。今天我再开始锻炼。我刚刚做完了( 再)一个锻炼,真的希望这次的锻炼不会让我没法正常(行)动。虽然上个星期我不能锻炼,可是(当然)我努力吃健康饮食了。我开心地告诉大家我减掉了三磅。三磅不(是)很多重量,如果能锻炼,肯定会减掉了更多的。尽管如此,三磅的减少依然是减重的(意味着体重的减少)。

 

文章写得很好,注意下面几点:

1、“了” 字的使用,这个字可以表示过去时,还能表示当时的状态。

例如:我几乎走不动(了) ,意思是这件事情已经发生了,而且告诉大家当时你真的很累很累。

2、“下楼梯” 中的“下”做动词用,可以不用“走”。另外,注意“甚至连。。。也。。。”这个关联词的使用。

例如:这个字很难,甚至连老师也不认识。      说明这个字太难了。

3、固定搭配: 正常行动。

4、谓语动词不能缺少。

例如:三磅不(是)很多重量。

5、“可是" 和 "当然” 的使用:“可是”表示意思的转折,“当然” 表示承接或肯定。

例如: 你吃饭了吗?

         我当然吃了。

         我很想吃,可是我太忙,没时间吃。

 

 

 

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报告我的进步

开始我的‘减肥和练出更好的体形' 的任务九天后,下文是我的进步。做完了我的第一个Wii《My Fitness Coach》游戏的锻炼以后,我几乎走不动, 甚至走下楼梯都很痛。 因此我不能做连续锻炼一周。今天我再开始锻炼。我刚刚做完了再一个一会儿锻炼,真的希望这次的锻炼不会让我没法正常动。虽然上个星期我不能锻炼,可是当然我努力吃健康饮食了。我开心地告诉大家我减掉了三磅。三磅不很多重量,如果能继续锻炼,肯定会减掉了更多的。尽管如此,三磅的减少减少的三磅依然是减重减下去的。
9 days into my ’lose weight, tone up‘ mission here's what's happening. After my first work out on the Wii I couldn't barely walk for a week, just getting down the stairs was agony, so the daily work out didn't happen. But I started working out agan today.. Just finished another one, hopefully this time it wont put me out of commission for days. I did watch what I ate of course and I am pleased to report that I did lose 3lbs over the week. It's not huge, and not as much as I could have lost if I'd been able to work out, but it is something

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报告我的进步

开始我的‘减肥和练出更好的体形' 的任务九天后,下文是我的进步。做完了我的第一个Wii《My Fitness Coach》游戏的锻炼以后,我几乎走不动, 甚至走下楼梯都很痛。 因此我不能做锻炼一周(因此我一周不能做锻炼)。今天我又开始锻炼。我刚刚做完了又一个锻炼,真的希望这次的锻炼不会让我没法正常动。虽然上个星期我不能锻炼,可是当然(但是)我努力吃健康饮食了。我开心地告诉大家我减掉了三磅。三磅不很多重量(不是很重),如果能锻炼,肯定会减掉了更多的。尽管如此,三磅的减少依然是减重的。
9 days into my ’lose weight, tone up‘ mission here's what's happening. After my first work out on the Wii I couldn't barely walk for a week, just getting down the stairs was agony, so the daily work out didn't happen. But I started working out agan today.. Just finished another one, hopefully this time it wont put me out of commission for days. I did watch what I ate of course and I am pleased to report that I did lose 3lbs over the week. It's not huge, and not as much as I could have lost if I'd been able to work out, but it is something

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