Good entry, Geek. This is really well written. I have a few small notes below:

Girlish hair style

Dad: I have given up all hope (you really don't have to add quotes at all, but you can to refer to each of your family talking "I have given up all hopes" -- because you use a colon : you're pretty much saying that they're saying this themselves, kind of like a screenplay or teleplay. It's more formal this way but completely appropriate)

Mom: My son looks so cool in this (can also say his) girlish hair style.

Younger Sister: I’m so impressed, I’m going to have this haircut next month.

Neo: I had this hairstyle when I was in six grades sixth grade. (that's a tough one, but usually grades are given an ordinal, which in this case is sixth) 

These are comments that have been passed onto me by my family related to my hair style. I don’t think it looks girlish at all, but it doesn’t matter now. I am going to have a complete haircut this morning. I am sick of this every day, now.  

Note: A view of my hair style. (if you want to be more specific you could say "attached picture" or "enclosed picture" -- "to enclose" usually means it's in paper mail, post mail, but people also refer to it in electronic/email/forum talk too)

Note: Ukrainian girl with blue dp, you seriously need to stop posting these stupid entries with no purpose at all. If you are that good at copy/paste, look for some data entry job, you will earn some coins as well.