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Could you help me correcting my composition please? Nowadays how to improve public heath is a hot topic in society. Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilites. That's a good idea. The life lies in the movement. If more sports facilities which easy to reach are built, it will increase possiblity that people do some sports, so that public health is improved. For example in our town, there was no sports facility before, in oue free time, only a few residents go for a walk after work. Most of them watched TV or play computer at home. But after that supervisor of community deceided to build some sports facilities for residents. Henforce we can do something new rather than stay at home. That's the advantage. However, some people say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measure are required. For some people, they don't like doing sport. Those sports facilities are no meaing for them. But on the other hand, everyone eat everyday, why not concentrate on the quality of the food. The reason is that some fake food emerge on the market, because of people's greed. More and more chemstrical substance are used for food. And it leads to many strange disease. Thus we have to supervise it strickly so that people eat health food. There are even more ways to improve public health, such as limitation of tobacoo, make a difference for environment, better for hospital system and so on. In my opinion, it's not a best way but a good way, to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities, there are also the other positive measures. We should depend on local situation, and then make the suitable plan. Our goal devote to improve public health.

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