Warm Sunlight

My cousin, who are 12 years old, visited to my house, so we went hiking before.

My 12 year old cousin came to visit me and we went hiking together. (このほうがナチュラルです。）

It was sunny without any clouds in the sky on that day and the best weather for hiking.

It was sunny and there were no clouds, the best weather for hiking.

A mountain we chose to climb up wasn't really high so that we all got to enjoy hiking as it is until the top of the mountain.

The mountain we chose to climb wasn't really that high, so we all enjoyed hiking to the peak. (peak = top of the mountain)

I remember that it took 2 hours or so to the top.

I remember that it took 2 hours or so to get to the top.

After we reached at the top, my cousin was full of energy. It's nice being young, haha. 

Even after we reached the top, my cousin was still full of energy. It's nice being young, haha.

We passed a bosky trail on the way, and it was so breezy and cool. Looking up, I saw the sunlight streaming through leaves swaying in the wind. I do love the beautiful scene. (よくできました！)

The sunlight I saw form the top of the mountain was completely different with the one I saw everyday.

The sunlight I saw from the top of the mountain was completely different from the one I saw everyday.

It usually unnecessary raises temperature, which makes me suffer from the heat, but the sunlight I saw there was like embracing people there with a warm hug.

Usually it is very hot and uncomfortable, but the sunlight I saw there was almost as if it were embracing people with warm hugs.

Just getting a little closer to the sky, you can see everything in a different way. I had tons of fun, and it was happy time.

Thank you for reading. See you soon.

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Warm Sunlight

My cousin, who is 12 years old, visited my house, so we went hiking. It was sunny that day, without any clouds in the sky, the best weather for hiking. The mountain we chose to climb wasn't really high, so we all got to enjoy hiking up to the top of the mountain. I remember that it took 2 hours or so to get to the top. After we reached the top, my cousin was full of energy. It's nice being young, haha.

We passed a bosky trail on the way, and it was so breezy and cool. Looking up, I saw the sunlight streaming down through leaves swaying in the wind. I loved the beautiful scene.
The sunlight I saw from the top of the mountain was completely different than the one I see everyday. It usually raises the temperature unnecessarily, which makes me suffer from the heat. However, the sunlight I saw there embraced people with a warm hug. Just getting a little closer to the sky, you can see everything in a different way. I had tons of fun, and it was happy time.

Thank you for reading. See you soon.