Mountains around chengdu

Mountains around Chendu （always capitalize proper names)
There are some famous mountains around Chengdu. For (always capitalize the first letter of the first word after a period) people live in chengdu ,it's very lucky and happiness .Xiling snow mountain is well known to many Chinese people with a pome (poem) by a famous ancient writer named Du fu.it looks magnificent and mystical .specially the snow peaks never melte all of years.when the sky is very clear,people live in chengdu down town even can see the snow peaks with bright light in the sun.at that monument all media talk about it and people feel good.Xiling snow mountain is just like guard protecting chengdu ,but Qingcheng mountain is like nice daughter to chengdu people.she is beautiful and elegant and quiet .make people feel comfortable and relaxed.she is famous vacationland in summer.

Mountains around Chengdu
There are some famous mountains around Chengdu.  For people who live in Chengdu the mountains make people feel very lucky and happy.  Xiling Snow Mountain (Xiling Snow Mountain must be capitalized if it is the proper name of the mountain)  is well known to many Chinese people through a poem written by a famous ancient writer named Du Fu.  The mountain looks magnificent and mystical, specially the snow peaks that never melt during the year. When the sky is very clear the people who live in downtown Chengdu can see the snow peaks under the sun's bright light and at that moment all media talk about it and people feel good.  Xiling Snow Mountain is like a guard protecting Chengdu but Qingcheng Mountain is like a nice daughter to Chengdu's people.  She is beautiful, elegant and quiet; making people feel comfortable and relaxed.  She is a famous vacation land in summer.

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