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Ice This afternoon Alex and I wanted to buy a lemon tea and we ask Brad whether he wants some, he said he just wants Ice with no tea and he will be the happiest one in the world haha .he just said it's for fun and thought we can't just buy some ice from that shop.when we at the shop I try to ask the clerk whether they can sale me some ice ,he looked at me and said yes! i was so surprised and it cost 2 Yuan for a package of ice ,but i told them i want use cup to carry it, and then he gave me a cup of ice ,while we wanted to leave, the guy behind the clerk said that the ice is ready, it's a package of ice and much more than the one he gave to me , and we came back to the clerk, is that for us? he was a little embarrass as the guy didnt know he was give us one already haha, and he just gave me all the ice so kind haha.... when we back to school, Brad was so surprise that we got a lot ice just cost 2Yuan

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This afternoon Alex and I wanted to buy lemon tea and so we asked Brad whether he wanted some, he said if we got him ice with no tea he would be the happiest person in the world..he just said it's for fun and thought why can't we just buy some ice from that shop.when we arrived at the shop I tried to ask the clerk whether they could sell me some ice ,he looked at me and said yes!

 

I don't have time to correct all of your entry, sorry.

Make sure you are using the proper tense. Since you are telling a story you should use mostly past tense.

Next time, try using quotation marks ("") so that we can know when dialogue stops and starts. This will make is easier for someone to correct the verb conjugations.

Good job!

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