fighting2

i'm going to be a temporary worker .haha,i'm very excited! It's my first time to make money for buying something which i like. i'm a adult. So i don't want to take money from partents. I need do many things by myself.Ok, I will work hard to make money, study hard!O(∩_∩)O

Hello, Sylvia. Your sentences here are very good. With regard to the word I, this is always writtten in capitals and all sentences should also start with a capital letter - eg I'm. Instead of 'time' we would probably use the word 'chance' or 'opportunity'. When the article 'a' is followed by another word beginning with a vowel - a,e,i,o,u - then 'a' is changed to 'an' such as 'an adult'. 

fighting2

I'm going to be a temporary worker .haha. So, I'm (i'm) very excited! It's my first chance/opportunity (time) to make money for buying something I (which i) like). I'm (i'm) an (a) adult so (So) I (i)  don't want to take money from my parents (partents). I need do many things by myself.Ok, I will work hard to make money, study hard!O(∩_∩)O