BY THE TIME SHE WILL REALIZE

In the darkest night the moon sometimes shines and gives us some light to see our way and keep going in life.
Like many people I am just another person walking in my country, sleeping in my bed. When night arrives, I eat something when my body is hungry. I am playing some sports, doing my homework, going to school, surfing the net but when night arrives I am praying for her, for her happiness, for her health, for her family, for her success. However, she does not realize that I am here for her, to make her feel good, to make her feel happy but she does not know anything about me, because I am just another person in this life, who is going to live his life like most people.
In time God will heard my prayers or maybe he will not but one day I will meet her and all my prayers will be heard by him, and in the end she is going to stay with me. Now I am just waiting...
By: Juan Card

So this was pretty well done! You should make your sentences shorter because in English they are run-on sentences. Run-on sentences are just sentences that are too long but may not really be grammatically wrong. Google "run-on sentences." Aside from that, job well done!