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Once upon a time one boy named Albert, he was very shy and had not friends.
One day walking down the street he met a girl named Elba Lazo , she had a nice smile, Albert is fell in love of she.
Walked together every day and per month born a beautiful relationship.
The relationship lasted 6 months. The 6 month happier of their lives.
Was a December 25th when everything changed.
Albert He came to the house on Elba Lazo with a bouquet of roses and a small bundle under his arm.
Enters the home for Elba Lazo and yells -Merry Christmas!!
When no one responds, him begins to look.
When he finally found, threw roses and the bundle.
She had dead, him pulled the gun and committed suicide.
Died by Elba Lazo.
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Hey how are you?
Your english is pretty good, but your past tense is a little off, as well as some of your present tense, but none the less, you are getting the hang of it, see below some corrections i made and hope it helps you: (also - that is a sad story :( )
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Once upon a time there was a boy named Albert, he was very shy and did not have any friends.
One day walking down the street he met a girl named Elba Lazo , she had a nice smile and Albert fell in love with her.
They walked together everyday for one month, and a beautiful relationship was formed.
The relationship lasted 6 months. The happiest six months of their lives.
It was on December 25th when everything changed.
Albert arrived at Elba Lazo's house with a small bundle of bouquet of roses under his arm.
Entered the home of Elba Lazo and yells -Merry Christmas!!
When no one responded, him began to look.
When he finally found her, he threw the bundle of roses.
She was dead, he pulled a gun and committed suicide.
Died by Elba Lazo.
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