animal

Animal
Hello, everyone. Im Hansom. I m a nine-year-old boy. Im very happy to stand here and give you a short speech, I hope that you will also have a happy day.
Today my topic is Animal. Do you like animals? Nearly everybody likes animals. Some of people like dogs, because they can help us. Someone likes rabbits, because theyre cuteDo you know what my favorite animal is? It is one of the most precious animals. They live in the ocean and good at swimming. They are very cute and beautiful. They not only swim fast, but are also smart. Most of their color is gray, only a small number of it are white. Though they look like fish, they are mammals. Because of their high IQ, dolphins can be trained by people. They can learn things very quickly and do all the actions accurate. They are very friendly.
Can you guess its name now? Yes, you are right. They are dolphins.
However, as we all known, the number of dolphins is getting smaller and smaller. Because of water pollution, there is less and less space for dolphins. Many people make money by hunting dolphins. if we dont protect them, maybe well lose our good friends some day. As a student, I hope more and more people should protect dolphins.
I love dolphins very much. and I hope dolphins are our good friends forever. I hope they can live in the blue sea happily and peacefully. Lets protect the animals together. Lets take actions now.
Thats all . Thank you very much .

  Hello Vivien.  How are you?

   (a) You are a nine year old girl.

"(b)   I'm  and not    Im

   Overall, your essay is thorough and   a good piece of exposition,  with concluding remarks about the Dolphins.

  Nicely done.

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animal

Animal
Hello, everyone. I'm Hansom. I'm a nine-year-old boy. Im very happy to stand be here and give you a short speechmessage, I hope that you will also have a happy day.
Today my topic is about animals. Do you like animals? Nearly everybody likes animals. Some of people like dogs, because they can help us. Someone people likes rabbits, because they're cute. Do you know what my favorite animal is? It is one of the most precious animals in the world. They live in the ocean and they are good at swimmers ing. They are very cute and beautiful. They not only swim fast, but are also smart. Mostof their color isUsually they are grey, only a small number of it them are white. Although they look like fish, they are mammals. Because of their high IQ, dolphins can be trained by people. They can learn things very quickly and do all the actions sorts of things accurately. They are very friendly.
Can you guess its name now? Yes, you are right. They are dolphins.
However, as we all known, the number of dolphins is getting smaller and smaller. Because of water pollution, there is less and less space for dolphins. Many people make money by hunting dolphins, if we dont protect them, maybe well may lose our good friends some day. As a student, I hope more and more people should will protect dolphins.
I love dolphins very much and I hope dolphins are will be our good friends forever. I hope they can live in the blue sea happily and peacefully. Let's protect the animals together. Let's take actions now.
Thats all . Thank you very much .

    Hello,everyone. My nephew will have an English speech competition. This is his speech draft, please help me check and correct it, thank you very much.

    Today my topic is "Animal". Do you like animals? Nearly everybody likes animals. Some of people like dogs, because they can help us. Someone likes rabbits, because they're cute. Do you know what my favorite animal is? It is one of the most precious animals. They live in the ocean and good at swimming. They are very cute and beautiful. They not only swim fast, but are also smart. Most of their color is gray, only a small number of it are white. Though they look like fish, they are mammals. Because of their high IQ, dolphins can be trained by people. They can learn things very quickly and do all the actions accurate. They are very friendly.
    Can you guess its name now? Yes, you are right. They are dolphins.
    However, as we all known, the number of dolphins is getting smaller and smaller. Because of water pollution, there is less and less space for dolphins. Many people make money by hunting dolphins. if we don't protect them, maybe well lose our good friends some day. As a student, I hope more and more people should protect dolphins.
    I love dolphins very much. and I hope dolphins are our good friends forever. I hope they can live in the blue sea happily and peacefully. Let's protect the animals together. Let's take actions now.
    That's all . Thank you very much .