Can someone correct this essay for me, thank you so much :)

Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Other think that it is always better to have a teacher.
Which do your prefer?
Use specific reasons to develop your essay.


In recent years, there has been a growing concern whether we need teachers in studying. Many people believe that with the development in technology and internet, they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. (However, it is undeniable that the teachers still play an important role in our studying-road. ) ( you should write that you agree or disagree with the subject of the topic)

First and foremost, teachers can help you get knowledge in the shortest time. With a wide range of knowledge base, they surely keep you in following the efficient way to achieve your target. Therefore, you can save time and get more leisure for other activities. Secondly, for each student, they probably find more comfortable approach than with a book to an issue. In fact, while a book and other resources can bring only certain information to you, teachers make it alive and student can get it easier more easily. Although a self-study students might do the job in their own way, it requires high self-awareness ability and not all students can (be like) (I think use "do") that.

To conclude, there is nothing wrong with studying on your own. However,(for the best solution) (This essay is a opinion essay, so I think use some phrase: I believie, In my opinion, I think, In my view), we do need some help from professors.

That is some things I think :D.