Reflection

Today we saw a film about Julius Caesar and the battle of a village. I like this film so much because it’s very interesting and exciting. In summary, Julius Caesar wants to destroy the village. There’s a flamen in this village. He can make magic water which makes people strong. Then there’s a (nother) fat and tall person that took a bath in the magic water when he was young, which made him powerful. And then the villagers all drink the flamens' magic water and dare to fight the enemy. Julius Caesar tries again and again, but he can’t destroy the village.

Reflection

Today we saw a film about Julius Caesar and the battle of a village. I like this film so much because it’s very interesting and exciting. In summary, Julius Caesar wants to destroy the village. There’s a flamen in this village. He can make magic water which makes people strong. There’s another fat and tall person, he took a bath in the magic water when he was young, so he is powerful. And then the villagers all drink flamen’s magic water and dare to fight against. Julius Caesar try again and again , but he can’t destroy the village.

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Today, we saw a film about Julius Caesar and the battle of a village. I liked this film so because it was very interesting and exciting. In summary, Julius Caesar wans to destroy the village. There's a flamen in this village. He can make magical water that makes people strong. There's another fat and tall person who took a bath in the magical water when he was young, so he is powerful. Once the villagers all drink the flamen's magical water, they then begin to daringly fight against Caesar. Try as he might, Caesar just can't destroy the village.

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