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We hide his jealousy, his feelings. We all have our bad days. Here's a Chinese phrase... "A flower cannot be red for a hundred days, neither can a person be in a good mood for a thousand days." Sometimes we want to seem unassailable. We hide his jealousy, his feelings. We spoil the relations which has not even begun. We fall in love, and to be disappointed try to give up on a person, rather than simply love. Thinking that it so would be easier. We are afraid of being rejected, so do not fend for themselves and do not give anyone a chance to anyone. We are tough, very cruel . Why? Now I want to be a child ... because only now I realize that the broken knees heal faster than broken heart ...

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We hide his jealousy, his feelings.

We all have our bad days.
Here's a Chinese phrase... "A flower cannot be red for a hundred days, neither can a person be
in a good mood for a thousand days."
Sometimes we want to seem unassailable.
 We hide his jealousy, his feelings.  (It's a little weird to say "we" and then "he" maybe you should say "He hides his jealuosly, his feelings.) We spoil the relations which has ave not even begun. 
We fall in love, and to be disappointed try to give up on a person, rather than simply love. (This sentence is good but "and to be disappointed" is a little unusual, do you want to say "We fall in love, and when we are disappoitned, we give up on a person, rather than simply love.")  
Thinking that it so would be easier. We are afraid of being rejected, so do not fend for themselves
and do not give anyone a chance to anyone.
We are tough, very cruel . Why?

Now I want to be a child ... because only now I realize that the broken knees heal faster
than broken heart ...

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We hide his jealousy, his feelings.

We all have our bad days.
Here's a Chinese phrase... "A flower cannot be red for a hundred days, neither can a person be
in a good mood for a thousand days."
Sometimes we want to seem unassailable.
We hide his jealousy, his feelings. We spoil the relations which has not even begun.
We fall in love, and to be disappointed try to give up on a person, rather than simply love.
Thinking that it so would be easier. We are afraid of being rejected, so do not fend for themselves
and do not give anyone a chance to anyone.
We are tough, very cruel . Why?

Now I want to be a child ... because only now I realize that the broken knees heal faster
than broken heart ...

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Mm048qWpxSU тум

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Yes, as prons says, mixing the 'person' first person 'We' and third person 'he' is misleading and wrong. It is possible to write in first person about a third person, but I don't think that is what you are doing - so you should use first person throughout: We hide OUR jealousy, OUR feelings so do not fend for OURselves
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Доченька! Человек без любви одинок, одиночество заставляет его страдать. Любовь заставляет страдать еще больше, чем одиночество! C'est la vie! C'est la vie!
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nice picture

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