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4.Process of growth / Personality
< Grow up with the Proverbs of Solomon >
By my father’s guidance, every day I transcribed one chapter of Proverbs and it in turn affected my values formation. I thought that I have to never to give up due to the poor circumstances and to take them to make a positive effect to on me to be by myself. [Independence]
Persistent challenge is a way of life that I’ve learned from my childhood. I believe that if you want to study, then you should make the chance choice to do it. So, I did my best to study well and as a result, I received a scholarship for 3 years of junior high school and four years of university. After entering the college, I did the part time jobs in my spare time for covering to cover my dormitory fee. When I needed to pay the registration fee for foreign internship program, my friends gladly lent me the money for that and I could give pay it back after finishing the program. The belief that we have to live together, but to make my own way by myself, forms a positive attitude and confidence in my mind.
[Sense of responsibility]
The most important value is the ‘Trust’ and it is gained from acting responsibly. In childhood, I went to the school about 30 minutes early and cleaned the classroom. During the trial period, I taught my class mate classmate who needed help. This character is has lasted with me until now. In the working work place, I always do my best to fulfill my task faithfully before the deadline. The ‘Trust’ gained from strict responsibility is the greatest asset of mine.
5. Aspirations/Resolution in Samsung
< Upright character, Job skills – Professional in every respect >
My best advantage attributes as General director of ‘Doshirak rus’ praised highly is was ‘confidence’ and a ‘sense of responsibility’. I’ve never gave given up, if I've decided to start something it . And if I started something, then I did gave my best effort possible to make a best positive result. Those kinds of characters traits made me a confidential confident marketing manager who didn’t know about the basics of marketing before. Also, I always try to do not to miss the composure to respect the seniors and care for the juniors as well. With the professional care of my own work and the compatibility with workmates, I’ll strive for being to be a reliable co-worker of Samsung. Samsung is the best global company in deed, as well as in name. Above the dream for as Russian regional expert, to Global talented person, I’ll humbly learn the company’s guidelines humblingly and give a challenge to improve my abilitiesability. The company has an organic structure, so that improvement of personal ability effects the whole company’s development.

Hope this helps. I'd hire you in a minute. Very impressive.