Part 2...(Uh oh... I lost all the formatting after I tried to copy and paste...)

It's here... https://www.dropbox.com/s/t0k02fbnk5u8hya/Part%202.docx

Oh no! It's too long... Part 1

1.Motive Motivation for the Application
< Dreaming of being a Regional Expert on of the Russian Federation >
Since I started starting university, I’ve developed a desire to become a regional expert on the Russian Federation. When I was an exchange student in Moscow, my hope was to come back return to Moscow again as a businessman, but not as a student. And 1 One year later, in reality my dream was realised when I came back to Moscow as an intern of Hyundai corporation through the support of KITA (Korea International Trade Association). For 6 months, I experienced attended various business meetings and fulfilled my own tasks completed a challenging series of tasks. It was a short, but full fulfilling experience. On the basis of this experience With this experience in hand, on Oct. 2010, I joined the company “Doshirak Rus”, which is an exclusive distributor of with? (we normally say exclusive distributor of a product) the corporation PALDO, and worked there for 2 years. Although I left the company by for personal reasons, still I love Russia and nothing is going to change my love for this state for all my natural. I have an unwavering passion for Russia and the culture here.

Friends, I need your help. Please correct my cover story! -1-

1.Motive for the application
< Dreaming of Regional Expert on Russia Federation >
Since I started university, I’ve developed a desire to become a regional expert on Russia Federation. When I was exchange student in Moscow, my hope was to come back to Moscow again as a businessman, but not as a student. And 1year later, in reality, I came back to Moscow as a intern of Hyundai corporation through the support of KITA(Korea International Trade Association). For 6months, I experienced various business meetings and fulfilled my own tasks. It was short, but full. On the basis of this experience, on Oct. 2010, I joined the company “Doshirak Rus” which is an exclusive distributor of the corporation PALDO and worked there for 2years. Although I left the company by personal reason, still I love Russia and nothing is going to change my love for this state for all my natural.

2. Major field of study
< The most important thing is a solid foundationbasics! >
For reaching To reach my goal of becoming a regional expert on Russia, I thought the most important thing is was language ability and a good understanding of my major. So, I studied all my major subjects consistently, and as a result, I went through college on a scholarship and graduated with a 4.21 GPA. Besides this, I passed a test of Russian language TORFL level 1 at on my first attempt, only 6 months after I had been in Moscow. and When I returned to Korea I got a top grade in another Russian test, ‘SNULT’. All of these efforts were a part of the process to make a basis foundation for to survive in the competitive world.
< Keep the balance between theory and practice! >
I’ve not only concentrated on study studies, but I've also tried to get business savvy.a savvy for practice. During the my university years, I chosen the part time jobs related to my major by priorities, like Russian market research, Russian economy research, English-Korean, Russian-Korean interpreting and translating and so on. In addition, for 2 years and 7 months, I worked in Hyundai and Doshirak as an intern and hands-on worker. as well. Going through that time, I could rub rounded the corners edges off me and I learned what work is like in the real world. the real work life is. Over those work periods, I've grown in confident confidence and I'm ever more so that I’ve been eager to transfer my strong commitment to my company,my assignments and my career to a challenging work environment where my passion to succeed will be an asset to the company.

Friends, I need your help. Please correct my cover story! -1-

1.Motive for the application
< Dreaming of Regional Expert on Russia Federation >
Since I started university, I’ve developed a desire to become a regional expert on of the Russian Federation. When I was an exchange student in Moscow, my hope was to come back to Moscow again as a businesswoman., but not as a student. And 1One year later, in reality, my dream was realised when I came back to Moscow as an intern of Hyundai corporation, through the support of KITA(Korea International Trade Association). For 6 months, I experienced engaged in various business meetings and fulfilled the tasks set before me.my own tasks. It The time was short, but a fullfilling experience. On the basis of With this experience in hand, on in October of 2010, I joined the company “Doshirak Rus”, which is an exclusive distributor of Dosirak noodles the of PALDO corporation PALDO and worked there for 2years. Although I left the company by personal reason, still I love Russia and nothing is going to change my love for this state for all my natural.  I was employed with' Doshirak Rus" from October of 2010 to........... and during that period developed a  great love and passion for Russia and it's culture, that I will carry with me through life.

2. Major field of study
< The most important thing is a solid basics! >
For reaching my goal becoming regional expert on Russia, I thought the most important thing is language ability and good understanding of my major. So, I studied all my major subjects consistently, as a result, I went through college on a scholarship and graduated with GPA 4.21. Besides this, I passed test of Russian language TORFL level1 at my first attempt only 6months after in Moscow and when I went back to Korea I got a top grade in another Russian test ‘SNULT’. All of these efforts were the process to make a basis for competitive world.
< Keep the balance between theory and practice! >
I’ve not only concentrated on study, but also tried to get a savvy for practice. During the university, I chosen the part time jobs related to my major by priority like Russian market research, Russian economy research, English-Korean, Russian-Korean interpreting and translating and so on. In addition, for 2 years 7 months, I worked in Hyundai and Doshirak as an intern and hands on worker as well. Going through that time, I could rub the corners off me and learn what the real work life is. Over those work periods, I’m confident that I’ve been eager to take my task with strong love of my company and my career. And now, I want to meet the new work place where my true passion will lie in.

Just another option for part 1.