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Soul (The first English poem I wrote)

All the things have passed away
Like the sands involved in the death of sea.
Why thou always struggle in the nightmare
absentminded and sobbing,
like the soma without a soul.
You got a long long path to go
with the sprite that only belonged to you
even the body is ruined,
even all thou friends have left you alone
and betrayed you,
treating you like abandoned dogs.
Your spirit is still there in your mind,
and never leave
She will die unless the sea have gone dry.
She will die unless there is no bright sky.
She is pure and white,
like snow,
like crystal,
like all the newborn upon the morning sunshine.



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Soul (The first English poem I wrote)

All the things have passed away
Like the sands involved in the death of the sea.
Why thou always struggle in the nightmare
absentminded and sobbing,
like the soma without soul.
You have a long long path to go
with the sprite (spirit?) that only belongs to you
even the body is ruined,
even all thou friends have left you alone
and betrayed you,
treating you like the abandoned dogs.
Your spirit is still there in your mind,
and never leaves
She will die unless the sea goes (or, has gone) dry.
She will die unless there is no bright sky.
She is pure and white,
like snow,
like crystal,
like all the newborns upon the morning sunshine.

P.S This is the poem I wrote after watching Malena, I hope you guys can point out my mistakes. I'll be grateful for that.