Could you please help me here?

Whether to be a doctor or a  computer engineer?

To make the right choice, you to answer these three important questions:Why  do we need these two professions? Why is  it so great to be  a doctor or  an IT worker? What personality type  do you have to have?

Working as a doctor can seem pretty difficult, because everyday you will see people suffering from disease and sickness but  hoping for a long life. Doctors need to have a sociable personality, because when it's necessary, one word and a warm smile can do what medicine may never achieve. The  terrible pain  that feels like a gunshot can make people die, but a bit of help can let them try and look forward to a new day. I think that this career  is so dangerous  and  comes with a high risk. Doctors have to be careful during operations because one mistake can end  somebody's  life. In emergency cases, doctors have to be ready  at all  times and must have the ability to make quick decisions. However, on the other hand,  a doctor is highly paid.

 A computer engineer's work seems exciting and wonderful. In this job you have to love  computers because you will be in front of them all the time.  For example,  surfing from  one type of software to an other and looking for new ideas to create some perfect software. I think  that you would enjoy having this career, because the real world can be transmitted through the computer to another specified language. In this job you need to be a talented technophile, hardworking and with an investigative personality.  This job is not for everyone, just for the ones who trust  themselves and know everything about computers of course. Working as a computer engineer is really rewarding.

  Both of these jobs are very important, because our world needs doctors to heal  people who all have different illnesses and we  need computer engineers to make  modern life more comfortable. For these two careers, we need to study hard to be successful and  we need to be  very responsible. It is said that these two jobs can be tedious, but also exciting at times.

You have good ideas and have put a lot of effort into this essay. I suggest that you talk about doctors and engineers in the plural sense.Don't forget your commas and full stops. Good luck:)