My hobbies

I have a lot of hobbies. First, I like playing football because it is an exciting sports. Second, I like chatting with other people, it's happyfun/enjoyable for me to chat with friends or strangers (or, it makes me happy to chat...), I can learn a lot from them and share my happiness and sorrow (*this is fine to say, but people would probably normally say sadness. "Sorrow" is usually less common in normal speech) with them. I also like listening to music,one of my favorite idols is Beyonce, her voice is peaceful but powerful. I hope to go to her concert a concert of hers ("her concert" makes it seem like you're hoping for a particular one) one day. I also like Rap; Jay-z and eminem are great. Last but not least, I like traveling around the world, so I must learn english well, I am trying to make improve it now.

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My hobbies

I have a lot of hobbies. First, I like playing football because it is an excitinged sports. Second, I like chatting with other people., it's happy for me to It makes me happy to chat with friends or strangers. I can learn a lot from them, and I share my happiness and sorrows with them. I also like listening to music. One of my favorite idols (or you can say "one of my favorite artists") is Beyonce. Her voice is peaceful but yet powerful. I hope to go to one of her concerts one someday. I also like Rap. Jay-z and eminem is  are great. Last but not least, I like traveling. (it is more common to just say I like traveling or I want to travel around the world) around world, so  This is why I must learn english well. I am trying to make  it  achieve this now.

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