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New technologies and the true relationships
I think the new technologies are a have made tremendous great advances in t time, recently especially technologies of those that involve communication like using the internet and mobile phones.
All people use daily this Today everyone uses these technologies daily and many people feel that they give also, to some people the use of this facilities and appliances seem giving them more freedom.
They can use these devices to communicate anytime and anywhere. and talk in each moment and inclusing in each place. It seems as if we have to our family and friends very close to us at all times. (talking is a form of communicating so it seemed rather repetive in the first sentence)
But (remember that you should never begin a sentence with "but") On the other hand, I supposse this these same advantages can become a problem if someone kind of people don't doesn't know how to as manage it. them.
By a side they There are the elders elderly, who a lot of them many of whom, can not adapt to the news times and the news ways of doing things but on the other hand (you were using this expression too much that it was starting to sound too repetitive so I have substituted them with other similiar phrases) and then there are the young people who spend a lot of money and inclusing waste a lot of hours a time each day in front of their computers, tablets or mobiles. They think they making friends and good social relationships but in the most cases they have just becomed dependents of these news technologies. In one other words: they have become addicts.
Good work Dani! I couldn't agree with you more (although sometimes I wonder it I have become a bit addicted myself!)
The True human relationships are made when you spend a good time with your family members or friends but not in front of a computer or your mobile phone.
Well written! As you can see I have made some changes to your sentence structure and corrected a few spelling mistakes. I also have tried to make some parts less repetitive to the reader by using equivilant phrases.
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