Can you check my english diary
Until evening i watched on Television with my family .
At 8:00 pm i met my friend named Mesrc for playing a game and drinking a beer , no sooner we meet than we went to the beer house andthen we spent time around two hours .
At mid night we went out in beer house then we drop by personal computer room for play a game . These days we both want to win about play a game . If i lose play a game for him then i will feel the frustration , so i have to win even he is mischievous guy
First round was started , it named Warcraft game , i lose a game OMG OMG so so sad.
but second round named Start-Craft , i won .
During the playing a game ,we did not know how to pass the time , so we should go now, we want to have it out this match but time is gone .
Finally we are draw . and over !!
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Can you check my english diary
Until evening , I watched on television with my family .
At 8:00 pm , I met my friend named Mesrc. for playing (We played) a games and drank a beer , no sooner we meet than(not too long after we met,) we went to the beer house and then we spent some time around two hours .
At mid(no space)night we went out of (the)beer house then we dropped by a PC room to play some games . These days , we both wanted to win about play a game (maybe you meant:We both agreed to play a bet) .whenever I lost play the game , for him then i will feel the frustration(I felt frustrated) , so I had to win , even if he is("He Is" may be compressedinto "He's) a mischievous guy .
First round has started , it named Warcraft game(the name of the game was Warcraft) , i lost a game OMG OMG so so sad. <-- XDD cuuute
but second round named Start-Craft (but when we played Star-craft on the second round), i won .
While playing the game ,we did not know how to pass the time (we did'nt know that time has passed by) , we had to go , we want to have it out this match but time is gone . (we wanted to continue the match,but we don't have much time *note:may also be:we ran out of time)
Finally the match wa a draw . It's over !!
^________^ v I hope this helps!
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