Search from various English teachers...
China flagVicky Ma
my wishes in 2013 There are a lot of things is very important for me i did in 2012.Although my work took a large part of my time,and meanwhile i had to manage squeezing some time for learning something.It's a fairly busy year for me,but what i got from it was more than i thought.So everything i did was worth and meaningfulAnd i'd like to give an appreciation to my boss who gave a lot of responsibilities to me,which made me had no time to look for a boy friend,which i also gained so much cherish experiences from it in the three years.Thank you very much my strict boss,i would really appreciate it if you can cut down some of my work in the new year even i know thats impossible. So my only wish in 2013 is that i wont be freaked out by my work.

Corrections · 2

1

my wishes in 2013

There are a lot of things is very important for me i did in 2012. (turn the sentence around so it is more natural)  I did/achieved a lot of things in 2012 that are very important to me

Although my work took up a large part of my time, and meanwhile at the same time i had to manage squeezing to squeeze in some time for learning study something. It's was a fairly busy year for me, but what i got from it was more than i could had expected thought. So everything i did was worthwhile and meaningful., aAnd I'd like to give an show my appreciation to my boss who gave me a lot of new responsibilities to me, which made me meant I had no time to look for a boy friend, but which meant I also gained so much many cherish valued experiences from it in the last three years (you only mentioned 2012). Thank you very much my strict boss, i would really appreciate it if you can cut down some of my work in the new year even though i know thats impossible! 
So my only wish in 2013 is that i wont be freaked out by my work.

 

Punctuation -space after comma, fullstop - capital 'I' for 我

0

My wishes in 2013

There are a lot of things which are is very important for to me i did that I achieved in 2012. Although my work took a large part of my time, and meanwhile I had to managed to squeezeing in some time for to learning something. It's was a fairly busy year for me, but what I got from it was more than iI thought. So everything I did was worthwhile and meaningful. And i'd like to thank  give an appreciation to my boss who gave me a lot of responsibilities to me (which made me meant I had no time to look for a boy friend), from which I also gained so much many cherished experiences from it in the last three years. Thank you very much my strict boss, I would really appreciate it if you can cut down some the amount of my work in the nNew yYear even though I know that's impossible.
So my only wish in 2013 is that I won't be freaked out by my work.

 

------------

 

Good Job!

 

Some notes :-

 

The personal pronoun "I" must be capitalised "..I won't be freaked out.."

A full stop needs a space after it - "...three years. Thank you..."

Contractions need an apostrophe - wont -> won't

Want to progress faster?

Join this learning community and try out free exercises!

Don’t miss out on the opportunity to learn a language from the comfort of your own home. Browse our selection of experienced language tutors and enroll in your first lesson now!

Start Learning Today