I need someone who can help me.

I should write a resume to get new job.
Are these sentences for my resume right ?

1. Job Experience
-Sensitivty Analysis of a Financial Model for the Efficient Bussiness Strategy of BOT Project 
- Writing an investment proposal for selling a solar power plant.
- Reporting and analyzing Sales performance.
- Reporting and analyzing Income performance.
- Analysis offor makets and competitors.
- Set-up value added planning and the monitoring of the core strategy.
- Writing a business plan with a task force member for M&A.


2. Self-Introduction
Hello,
My name is Min.
I double majored in Mathematics and Bussiness at ABC University located in Seoul.
I used to work in the department of Business Planning in the IT company called ABC.
I am a strong worker and value commitment. and Once I commit to something I finish what I have started.
I also, always have a positive attitude.
Hiring me for this part of your business will be helpful to your company.
I would really like to work for your company and will assure you that I can add to the success of your business. that your hiring of me will be advantagous to you.
Thank you for your time