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My Birthday Today is my birthday. I have planned to celebrate my special day in a simple and religious way. I've invited orphans to come to my house today.. we are going to read The holy Qur'an and pray for my happiness. I've bought a goat for my "Akikah" (akikah means slaughter a goat, in Islam we have to slaughter one goat for girls and two goat for boys when a baby born, because my parents didn't do it when I was born, so I decided to do it now). It would be happy for me if I hadn't to go to funeral home (last Saturday my boss' beloved father passed away) so today I go there again become a reception. I couldn't come to my own party, so sad. :( but it's OK, my deep condolences go to his family.

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My Birthday

Today is my birthday. I have planned to celebrate my special day in a simple and religious way. I've invited orphans to come to my house today.. we are going to read the holy Qur'an and pray for my happiness. I've bought a goat for my "Akikah" (akikah means "slaughter a goat". In Islam, we have to slaughter one goat for girls and two goats for boys when a baby is born. because Since my parents didn't do it when I was born, so I decided to do it now).
It would be happy for me if I hadn't didn't have to go to funeral home, but last Saturday my boss's beloved father passed away. So today I will go there again become a reception. I couldn't come to my own party, so sad. :(
but it's OK. My deep condolences go to his family.

 

Happy Birthday! It sounds like you will have an interesting day. Do you have to slaughter the goat yourself? 

 

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You're welcome kevin.. :)
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All of life in one moving paragraph. Thank you for sharing with us.
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Thank you Vanlis :)
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Happy Birthday!

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