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10.9.2010 My cousin sent a message to me. His friend will go to the college. He wants me have dinner with them. It’s a good idea. But I promise I will go to watching a movie with Dan. So I reject his invite. Today I saw many students came to our school. I remember the first I came to here. It’s seems everything appear again. Well. I’m a senior. I felt I’m older than before. Suddenly I really miss my mom. To tell you the truth, she will came here celebrate min autumn festival with us. That’s a good new, isn’t it? Well. I am waiting for my roommate Dan. She will go to cinema with me. And I think I must buy a gift to Shan. I hope she will like it. But I don’t want to waste too much money. Ha Ha OK. I must dress up now. I want to look more beautiful than before. Bye~

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10.9.2010

My cousin sent me a message to me. His friend will go to the college. He wants me have dinner with them. It’s a good idea, but I promised I would go to watching a movie with Dan. So I rejected my cousin's invite.

Today I saw many students come to our school. I remember the first I came to here. It ’s seems everything is new again. Well, I’m a senior now. I feel as though I’m older than before. Suddenly I really miss my mom. To tell you the truth, she will come here to celebrate the Mid-Autumn Festival with us. That’s a good news, isn’t it?

Well, I am waiting for my roommate Dan. She will go to the cinema with me. And I think I should buy a gift for Shan. I hope she will like it. But I don’t want to waste too much money. Ha Ha

OK, I must get dressed up now. I want to look more beautiful than before. Bye~

Hope that's clear enough!  When you talk about two other people (Dan, your cousin), I was a bit confused by "his invite" ...whose?  Dan is recognised more as a boy's name in English, the female equivalent would be Dani.  So that also confused me a little. But, you will meet girls who call themselves Dan(ielle). :)

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10.9.2010

My cousin sent a message to me. His friend will go to the college. He wants me have dinner with them. It’s a good idea. But I promise I will go to watching a movie with Dan. So I've rejected his invite.
Today I saw many students came to our school. I remember the first time I came to here. It’s seems everything appear again. Well. I’m a senior. I felt I’m older than before. Suddenly I really miss my mom. To tell you the truth, she will come here to celebrate min autumn festival with us. That’s a good new, isn’t it?
Well. I am waiting for my roommate Dan. She will go to cinema with me (We'll go to the cinema together, it's better, i guess ;) ), And I think I must buy a gift to Shan. I hope she will like it. But I don’t want to waste too much money. Ha Ha
OK. I must dress up now. I want to look more beautiful than before. Bye~

well, i'm not so good in english, so i've probably made few mistakes, Have a nice day ;) bye bye.....

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I trust you!!!
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Hey~I believe I will be better than before.
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