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Heart Disease Heart disease affects so many people that it has become a serious concern for medical science. The heart is a complex organ that is vulnerable to hereditary as well as environmental risks. Cardiologists think of these risk factor as either major or mirror causes of heart disease. There are five major causes of heart disease. First, as a result of family history, you are at a higher risk for developing heart disease if your parents or grandparents have had it. Second, people who are usually under high blood pressure had better been careful since it causes the heart to work too hard and can damage arteries. Third, high cholesterol levels are also very dangerous because fatty deposits build up in blood vessels. Fourth, as a consequence of diabetes, it can lead to hardening of the arteries and heart attacks. And the final major cause is smoking cigarettes. As you know, cigarettes are made from many harmful ingredients; therefore, smokers are two or three times more likely to have a heart attack than nonsmoker. Besides those major causes, there are several minor causes of heart disease. The first one is having a type A personality. Consequently, people become easily stressed, and sometimes are overly competitive, aggressive, and intense. In addition, having a sedentary lifestyle is also not good for your health because you do not get enough exercise. And another cause is overweight and have a poor diet. For this reason, you will be at risk of many diseases, including heart disease. From many those causes, people should get a healthy style and good personal habits to lessen the risk of heart disease. For instance, people need to have a scientific menu and follow it everyday because if you eat much fruits, vegetables, fishes, seafood and less meat, you will own the stable blood pressure. And you know, scientists have demonstrated that people do exercise usually will get a strong skeleton; therefore, it’s necessary for you to spend about fifteen to thirty minutes doing exercise everyday. Especially, you need also say no to tobacco and bad beverages to protect your heart. In conclusion, heart disease was caused by a numbers of risk factors, including major causes and minor cause. Who can know heart disease will come in you tomorrow? Therefore, let’s get some healthy habits to avoid it from now.

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^^~ Today my group will perform an English lesson on Writing skill, and this is one of the tasks I wrote. My writing is really not good... =[
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you very complex notebook entry to write. there are some mistakes in it, but you communicated your ideas very well :D

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