To Whom it May Concern

To Whom it May Concern:

I am a professor of Visual Communication at Beijing Institute of Fashion Technology. I specialized in book design. In this area, I have been a professor for fifteen years and I have taught students for over ten years. I am glad to recommend my student, Jia Jia Song , to continue his graduate study in your university. During her schooling time in college, I was her teacher for three years and we have known each other since 2009. In my view, Jia Jia Song really is an intelligent student who is always full of innovative ideas, and I definitely always encourage her to materialize his plans or projects.

Jia Jia Song is always interested in participating in some social organizations about that offer workshops or brainstorming games (brainstorming games is kind of a poor word choice). She He said he could (could implies future tense) meet lots of newest artists there and share stimulating thoughts with them each other. After that, she he made a series of works (poor word choice - after that he would create a new design)  that were (it's past tense? you are telling what already happened correct?) different form his former design style. Honestly, I really think that she he  hasd found another way to annotate (annotate is a poor word choice - maybe something like recreate her own thoughts) her own thought. She he found her own unique, best and efficient way to develop herself and study, either both her characters or and professional skills in the arts.

Foremost, I am highly impressed by his talent in illustration. In 2010，her his  illustrations were choosen by a clothing company, which produced a series of T-shirts with Jia Jia Song's illustrations. in cooperation. After that, her illustrations were awarded in a HongKong T-shirts contest, .Her illustrations does are a great help to (poor word choice, try - Her illlustrations offer tremendous benefit in book design) the book design. In 2011, her his book (was it really his OWN book, or was it a book that used his illusions) took part in the first College Book Design Exhibition after her his hard work. So, she he? has enough experience for social practice. In addition to that, her interpersonal relationship is equally outstanding, so many students like her.


So, I suggested her to continue studying and researching in high-level at a higher level university. Now I strongly recommend Jia Jia Song to the program she choose to study in at your school. I’m convinced that you will be happy to see a brilliant and versatile young girl, and I believe she will not only do her best in your school, but will lighten (but it will blossom) her future career as well. I believe her choices.
(the last sentence 'I believe her choices ???' is not a complete sentence)

Thank you for concerning (maybe you mean 'considering') this recommendation Sincerely.

You used 'she' so many times, but you also used 'he' and 'his'? 他 or 她 ??

To Whom it May Concern

To Whom it May Concern: 

I am a professor of visual vommunication at the Beijing Institute of Fashion Technology. I have been a book design professor for fifteen years and I have taught students for over ten years. I am glad to recommend my student, Jia Jia Song, to continue her graduate study in your university. During her time in college, I was her teacher for three years and we have known each other since 2009. In my opinion, Jia Jia Song is really an intelligent student who is always full of innovative ideas. I always encourage her to fulfill her plans or projects. 

Jia Jia Song is always interested in participating in workshops or brainstorming games organized by different organizations. She said she could meet a lot of new artists there and share stimulating thoughts with each other. After that, she made several series of works that were different from her former design style. Honestly, I really think that she had found another way to express her thoughts. She found a unique and efficient way to develop herself and her studies as well as her character and professional skills in arts. 

Furthermore, I am highly impressed by her talent in illustration. In 2010，her illustrations were chosen by a clothing company, which produced a series of T-shirts with Jia Jia Song's illustrations on them. After that, her illustrations won in a Hong Kong T-shirt design contest. Her experience in making illustrations helped improve her book designing skills. In 2011, her book became part of the first College Book Design Exhibition. So, she has enough experience in social work. In addition to that, her interpersonal skills are equally outstanding, so many students like her. 


So, I suggested that she continue studying and researching in the graduate level. Now, I strongly recommend Jia Jia Song to the program she chose to study in your school. I’m convinced that you will be happy to see a brilliant and versatile young girl as one of your students.I believe that she will not only do her best in your school but will also work hard to improve her future career as well. I believe in her. 

Thank you for considering this recommendation.

Sincerely,

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