First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Hello,everyone nice to meet you!
I am glad to introduce myself, I am Sunshine, a girl and I like talking.
I come from China and i'm 23 years old. I just graduate last July 2012. My major is Business English but my English is poor .
I hope to improve my English skill so that I can do my work .

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Hello,everyone! Nice to meet you.
I am glad to introducing introduce myself. I am sunshine girl and I like talking.
I come from China and I am 23 years old. I have am just a graduated when on 7th of (in which month) in 2012. (For example, I have just graduated on 7th of April, 2012.) My majoy is Business English but my English is still poor .
I hope to improve my English skills that it can may do my work help me to do my job efficiently.

I suppose that your name is not Sunshine. It is a slang which means a constantly cheerful girl.

"I just graduated OR I've just graduated" - both sound perfectly correct in American English.

Don't forget to use "in" + month or year and "on" + date (with the year or without it) or day of the week.

Don't say like that "English skill". There are several skills related to English.