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Walk in Taipei (4) Well, I finally reached the museum. Now I have reached two National Palace Museum, Beijing and Taipei. The National Palace Museum of Beijing was very very extensive, and of the Taipei was also very large. To enter the building, I must go up many steps of the stairs. That day was very sunny day,so it was very hard work. When I had been to Beijing, I had been taken by my friend, but I came here alone,I was impressed which I think of it. I deposited my passport at the reception, and I borrowed the audio guide which I can hear in Japanese. Many and various works were exhibited there, craft objects, china, and calligraphy...Some were made in prehistoric age, Some were made in modern times. I could hear the explanation of that works on the audio guide, so I understood better about that than I just saw them. There were many tour parties which came from China, they were taken by each guide. When I saw a work, a guide took his party to where I was seeing.I was surrounded by them, and I couldn't move from there. It couldn't be helped, so I listened to the guide's explanation pretending that I was Chinese tourist, however I couldn't understand Chinese... Afterward, I feel hungry, so I went to restaurant in the museum, and had some yamcha. At the cash desk, I had the courage to say "很好吃了" to the staff,then she smiled at me. I went out and moved to Chih-shan Garden where was in the site of the museum. It was very hot in the sunny place, but when I was in the shade of trees, I feel so cool!! Strangely,there were fewer people there than in the museum. This garden could be enter free of charge if they had the stub of the musium's ticket. It was very nice place, why they didn't come ? I was healed my tiredness with hearing sounds of a river,green, and the children's voice playing there. I've got a lot of satisfactions at the museum and the garden.I want to come here again,and I will.

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hope u can come to xian which the oldest city in china
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Wow, you wrote a very good and lengthy entry. Congratulations! It is very well done. Some major things you want to look at are: 1) The short-term, long-term usage of words, 2) Trying to avoid commas before the word "and," 3) and Spaces after periods. 很不错! 我从改写你的文章才懂得英文有多么难.
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Walk in Taipei (4)

Well, I finally reached the museum. Grammatically, this is a fragmented sentence, but while speaking, it is okay.
Now I have reached been to two National Palace Museums, Beijing and Taipei.
The National Palace Museum of Beijing was very, very extensive, (period) and of the Taipei was also very large.
To enter the building, I must go up many steps of the stairs. That day was a very sunny day, so it was very hard work.
When I had been went to Beijing, I had been taken by my friend  my friend took me there, but I came here alone, (period) When I think of it, I was am impressed [with myself]. which I think of it.
I deposited left my passport at the reception, and I borrowed the audio guide which I can hear in Japanese. "Deposited" is more of a permanent word. For example, "I deposited my check at the bank."
Many and various works were exhibited there,: (colon)craft objects, china, and calligraphy... (space) Some were made in prehistoric ages, Some others were made in modern times.
I could hear the explanation of that the works on the audio guide, so I understood better about that than what I just saw them.
There were many tour parties which came from China, they were taken led by each guide. While "my friend took me" is okay, "being led" by a guide is more natural as it is more short-term.
When I saw was looking at a work, a guide took his party to where I was seeing. I was surrounded by them, and I couldn't move from there. It couldn't be helped, so I listened to the guide's explanation pretending that I was a Chinese tourist, (semi-colon) however I couldn't understand Chinese...
Afterward, I feel was hungry, so I went to a restaurant in the museum, and had some yamcha. "I was hungry afterwards" is more natural, but what you said is correct.
At the cash desk, I had the courage to say "很好吃了" 很好吃 is what's correct, but I'm glad you had the courage to say it! to one of the staff, then she smiled at me.
I went out and moved to Chih-shan Garden where [which?] was in the site of the museum.
It was very hot in the such a sunny place, but when I was in the shade of trees, I feel felt so cool!! "
"It was very cool under the shade of the trees" or "the shade of the trees cooled me" is more natural, as "I'm so cool" is more like "I'm so awesome!" which I'm sure you are, but not related to this sentence. ^.~

Strangely,there were fewer people there than in the museum. This garden could be entered free of charge if they had the stub of the museum's ticket. It was very a nice place, why they didn't they come ?
I was healed my tiredness with hearing sounds of a river,green, and the children's voice playing there.
My exhaustion (tiredness) was alleviated (healed) by hearing sounds of the river, rustling of the greens (you cannot hear a color), and the children's playing.
I've got a lot of satisfactions at from the museum and the garden. I want to come here again,and I will.

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天下为公, What is this meaning ? I was in very happy time to see a lot of works, and to be close to nature. I think they are both wonderful.
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You kown there're many great grade which isn't be known in China.So just a litter people come here ,The people like the modern thing and they forget the nature ,But I 'm happy I'm so close nature.

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