How to Ehance Our Sense of Happiness
The topic is How to Enhance Our Sense of Happiness
How to Enhanse Our Sense of Happiness.
With the development of fiianly, There are more and more people take serciously of Happiness. Then, how to enhanse our sense of happiness, Many people hold different oppoints .So there is a hot debate on it .
Some people argue that own much money can enhanse their sense of happiness. They suppose that Money can help them get whatever they physical requirement. Moreover,They would be feel more comfortable than before in this way. However ,Other people ,who have opposite point ,think having a lovely family would be the best way to improve their sense of happiness. There is no doubt that is raised by people’s mentally. At the same time ,They hold that get more happiness from sipiritual level is better than from materical level due to which one is got forever .
In gentally, Ehance the sense of happiness includes not only meterical level but also sipiritual level .But if someone have much money but living with a negative surrowding ,I am sure he wouldn’t be happy. On the other hand ,if someone have a positive attitude about life but short of money ,maybe,they would also feel happy.SO in my view ,Whatever the way people enhance the sense of happiness are all originate in their want.Making our pick up ourselves happiness .Only in this way ,can we feel more and more happiness .this is my point
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How to Enhance Our Sense of Happiness
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With the development of fiianly (What is fiianly? Could you please explain what you mean?), there are more and more people take (Do you mean "talking"?) seriously of happiness. On how to enhance our sense of happiness, many people hold different oppinions. So there is a hot debate on it.
Some people argue that owning a lot of money can enhance their sense of happiness. They suppose that money can help them get whatever they require. Moreover, they would feel more comfortable than before in this way. However, other people think having a lovely family would be the best way to improve their sense of happiness. ("However" already implies an opposite oppinion) There is no doubt that is raised by people’s mentally. (Could you please explain what you mean in this sentence? It does not make sense.) At the same time, they hold that to get more happiness from spiritual level is better than from material level due to which one lasts forever.
In gentally (This word does not make sense. Please explain waht you mean.), enhancing the sense of happiness includes not only meterial level but also spiritual level. But if someone has a lot of money, and living with a negative surrounding, I am sure he wouldn’t be happy. On the other hand, if someone has a positive attitude about life but short of money, maybe, that person would feel happy. So, in my view, whatever the way people enhance their sense of happiness are all originate in their want. Making our pick up ourselves happiness. (I am not sure what you mean in this part also.) I think that only in this way we can feel more happiness. (Do not need another "more".)
Apart from my notes above, most of the corrections I made consist of using proper grammar, spelling, and punctuation. Perhaps you could read an English dictionary for checking the spelling of words, and maybe get another book on proper use of grammar and punctuation for English? These mistakes are not a big problem, though, as many native English speakers have trouble using proper grammar, spelling, and punctuation (I myself was assigned this book [http://www.amazon.com/Little-Handbook-Student-Should-Edition/dp/0205585744/ref=tmm_pap_title_0] to improve my grammar and punctuation).
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