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Fair in my town This days, a fair is being celebrated in my town. In general people is glad in this days of feast because is the most great festival in my town, then everyone let to work and change his tools, his computers and his cars and lorries for a time that spend with his families and friends. Here there is a enormous fairground for five days and people go to it twice per day. The fist one time is in the lunch-time or in the afternoon, especilly people in mid age, they go to the fair to lunch or to have a drink with friends. At this time riders with his horses also go to the fairground, the Spanish word for this people is "Caballistas" and they take a walk by the streets around the fair, also at this time there are a lot of carriages pulled by horses. People on these carriages wear traditional Andalusian dresses. The second period is in the evening when is getting dark. Then all people, old and young go out to enjoy with the attraction in the fair. But also to meet to friends, to dance, and to go to some music concert. Other important time in the fair is when the British tea timeis, the five o'clock in the afternoon, here every day is celebrated a bullfight in the bullring. Personally I don't like this bullfights because is a cruel act where a animal is hurt and it suffer to death only to the entertainment of a few people. But is very traditional but I think thingos are going to change in the future about this subject.

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Fair in my town

Over the next few days, a fair is being celebrated in my town. In general people are glad because it is the biggest  festival that takes place in my town,  everyone finishes work early to spend time with their families and friends.
Here there is a enormous fairground that lasts for five days and people go to it twice per day.
The first one time is during  lunch-time or in the afternoon, especially middle aged people, they go to the fair for lunch or to have a drink with friends.
At this time riders with his horses also go to the fairground, the Spanish word for those people is "Caballistas" and they take a walk by the streets and around the fair, also at this time there are a lot of carriages pulled by horses. People in these carriages wear traditional Andalusian dresses.

The second period is in the evening when it is getting dark. Then all people, old and young go out to enjoy with the attractions of the fair. But also to meet to friends, to dance, and to go to a music concert.

Other important time at the fair is when the British tea time, at five o'clock in the afternoon. Every day is celebrated with a bullfight in the bullring.
Personally I don't like this bullfights because it is a cruel act where an animal is hurt and it suffers to death only for the entertainment of a few people. But is very traditional but I think things are going to change in the future regarding this.

 

Great story Dani, it makes me want to come to Andalucia, but I think you are having a lot of rain at the moment.

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Overall this is a good bit of work. Your first sentence is passive. I would recommend staying with active voice, or subject, verb and then object. My town is celebrating a fair instead of a fair is being celebrated in my town. Also fair and feast are not synonyms in English.
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Hola Dani, does your city have this fair every year? Is it always on the same dates? Nick
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Fair in my town

This These days, a fair is being celebrated in my town. In general people is sre glad in this days of feast because it is the most great  best festival in my town. then Everyone let to leaves their work and change his tools, his computers and his cars and lorries for a to spend time that spend with his their families and friends.
Here there is a enormous fairground and for five days and people go to it twice per day.
The first one time is in the during lunch-time or in the afternoon, especilly people in mid age, they go to the fair to  for lunch or to have a drink with friends.
At this time riders with his horses also go to the fairground, the Spanish word for this these people is "Caballistas" and they take a walk by the streets around the fair, also at this time there are a lot of carriages pulled by horses. People on these carriages wear traditional Andalusian dresses.

The second period is in the evening when it is getting dark. Then all people, old and young go out to enjoy with the attraction in the fair. But also to meet to friends, to dance, and to go to some a music concert.

Another important time in the fair is when the British tea time , the at five o'clock in the afternoon. here Every day is celebrated there is a bullfight in the bullring.
Personally I don't like this bullfights because it is a cruel act where a animal is hurt and it  they suffer to death only to for the entertainment of a few people. But is very traditional. but I think things are going to change in the future about this subject.

 

Dani I corrected really quickly as I'm leaving for work. Hope you get some better ideas!

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