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Outdoor trips of kindergarten are a series of activities that kindergartens organize children go out to do field observation in order to achieve some certain aims of learning. The outdoor trips play an important role both in Chinese and American kindergartens' activities. The purpose of this paper is to provide a useful reference for our country through comparing the similarities and differences of the two countries' outdoor trips in kindergartens from visiting purpose, community resources, forms and guiding strategy.

Outdoor trips of kindergarten are a series of activities organized by kindergartens that children go out to do field observation in order to achieve certain aims of learning. The outdoor trips play an important role both in Chinese and American kindergartens' activities. The purpose of this paper is to provide a useful reference to our country through comparing the similarities and differences of visiting purpose, community resources, forms and guiding strategy between the two countries' outdoor trips in kindergarten.