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After practicing on a whole summer holiday’s exercise, I can stay→concentrate during a whole lesson with enough attention. The first lesson mainly told us some method→methods in→on/about searching information, such as “+””-””*”,those symbol’s effecting in searching in→on google or baidu and so on. I feel→felt I learned a lot.

After practicing a lot on summer holiday, I could concentrate during a whole lesson. The first lesson mainly told us some searching methods, including "+","-",and their effects in searching on Google, Badidu and so on. I felt I learned a lot today. 

Grammar:

1. after a whole summer holiday's exercise 少用....'....的结构

   →after exercising on summer holiday  

2. 全神贯注 concentrate on sth...注意力更加集中 concentrate more on sth

3. including...such as 区别

Include  i learned a lot today, including A,B,C,D;（including 强调“包括”）

such as  some of my friends are there, such as Tom,Jack,Jim.（such as 用于“举例”）

Summary

1. 故事、日记的时态是过去式！将来动作用过去将来时

2. 写句子的时候想着主语与动词是否一致；即主语能不能做这个动作

3. 描述“的”，尽量不要用....'s.. 显得句子很冗长

4. 注意including 和such as的区别，表包括时，要用including

Wrong Correct

Err…I ever→once thought the internship must→would go to a company and learn some practical skills or even learn how to make medicine.

Once I thought I would do my internship in a company and learn some practical skills or even learn how to make medicine.

Grammar:

1. internship (noun.)实习期，实习经历 do my internship/start my internship

the internship would go to a company（主语是“实习”，go 不能做它的宾语。）

However, today was the first day of internship. However, we stayed in the classroom and attended lessons instead of going to a company, what’s→what a pity!

We started our internship today. However, we stayed in the classroom and attended lessons instead of going to a company as expected. What a pity!

Grammar:

1. What a pity!...不是what's a pity

2.注意冠词的使用： 在教室里 in the classroom; 去公司：go to a company

只要是可数名词，前面都要想着加冠词。 

According to the leading teacher→the faculty internship advisor， We will→would attend the lecture teaching us→about how to use the net to search the needed→necessary information online in the first week. And then we will have a small test. After that, we will go to the→a company and practice really→start an actual practice.

According to what faculty internship advisor told, we would attend the lecture about how to search necessary information online this week. Then we would have a small test. After that, we would go to a company and start an actual practice.

Grammar:

1. 记录故事/日记时用过去式，当表示将来的打算时，也应用过去将来时 would do sth

(昨天已经提过！)

2.学院实习指导老师：faculty internship advisor

3. the lecture about……（可以直接用介词更简洁；）

4. 如何造句

怎样用网络寻找有用信息→（怎样-主语)（寻找-谓语）（有用信息-宾语）（用网络-状语）how to search necessary/useful information online/through internet 

5. actual practice 实践

ieveryday passage

Err…I always thought the internship must go to a company and learn some practical skills or even how to make medicine. However, today was the first day of internship. We stayed in the classroom and attended lessons instead of going to a company, what a pity!

According to the leading teacher, we will attend the lecture about how to use the net to search required information in the first week. And then we will have a small test. After that, we will go the company and practice really.

After doing exercises whole summer, I can stay a whole lesson with enough attention. The first lesson mainly told us some methods in searching information. Symbols such as “+””-””*”, effect in searching in google or baidu and so on. I feel I learned a lot.  

I'm not sure if these are correct since I am a student like you. But I will be glad if I could help a bit.