The beautiful dancer
There was a earthquake in 四川 on May 12th,2008.The heroine of my article is a survivor of it who lost her legs and her daughter.She was unluky but at the same lucky,because she is a brave person.She quickly swept her tears away and stood up again to helped other people out of the darkness.She managed to dance again less than two months after her injury.Half a moth later she attened a performance and danced on a drum.Because of her injury she almost fell off the drum several times but she sticked to performance and complete it at last.All the audience were impreesed deeply by her dedication.She quickly returned to the stage with self-confidence.In her diary,she wrote to her daughter:'my baby,I hope that you are well in paradise where you don't have hurt and pain.Wherever you are,I love you forever.I will live on unwaveringly for you.'She lost her baby,in place of it she gave her love more children.
I am very astonished that the small body has an enormous energy.Disaster is ruthless and life is so frail before it,but love is great and it can creat wonder.In difficult times we can overcome our frailty and be unlimited in our braveness.We can face reality bravely and complete a new life.
In the during bad time,I often complained of it.I always thought why me,why only me.It seemed unfair to me.Now I want to thank God for giving me everything.It did not matter whether things turned out good or bad, because from difficulty and pain I learned to know what was happiness.I no longer think about what I have lost; instead I cherish everything I have.
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Lynn, your essay is beautifully written and it truly moves me to read it. Aside from a few spelling and tense errors (already identified by "Caligal in Beijing") your writing sound like fluent English. Thanks for writing this, and I look forward to reading your next essay.
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The beautiful dancer
There was an earthquake in 四川 on May 12th, 2008.The heroine of my article is aI am very astonished that the small body has an enormous energy.Disaster is ruthless and life is so frail before it,but love is great and it can create wonder.In difficult times we can overcome our frailty and be unlimited in our braveness.We can face reality bravely and
During bad times, I often complained of it.I always thought why me,why only me.It seemed unfair to me.Now I want to thank God for giving me everything.It did not matter whether things turned out good or bad, because from difficulty and pain I learned to know what was happiness.I no longer think about what I have lost; instead I cherish everything I have.
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