End of this summer holiday

Today is my last day of this summer vocation .Although the class will start on next Monday ,which means I still have two more days to enjoy,I will leave to school tomorrow anyway.The holiday isn't a long one but it is meaningful.I went to the Huangshan Monutain .The view there is really beyond comparison.However ,the day we climbed the mountain rained dog and cat and we all got wet.At the same time , we even had a basketball match with the local residents .Luckily we were the final winner which is really unforgettable.Besides,I went to the EXPO twice but the long queue there was boring .So I went to some case pavilions instead of the Country pavilions and it proved to be a right and wise decision.
Now the new semester is coming and I have to work hard again.It is bound to be tough but I am sure I will make it.See you next time.

I have a few comments for you.  First, there are different ways to write this passage.  Here is how I would write it in 白话.  Some of what you write is “correct but not common,” that is grammatically correct but not the way we commonly speak.

 

Today is the last day of my (or: the) summer vacation.  Classes start next Monday (or: on Monday), which means I still have two  more days to enjoy.  I’ll leave for school tomorrow.  The holiday isn’t a long one but it’s meaningful.   I went to Huangshan Mountain.  The view from there is really beyond comparison.  However, the day we climbed the mountain it rained cats and dogs and we all got wet.  While we were there we even had a basketball game with the local residents.  We were lucky to win.  It was really unforgettable.  In addition, I went to the EXPO twice but there were  long lines there, so I went to the Case Pavilions instead of the Country Pavilions and it proved to be the right decision (or: a wise decision).

The new semester is about to start (or: is almost here) and I have to continue working hard.  It is bound to be tough but I’m sure that I’ll make it.  See you next time.

 

Vacation = 假期

Vocation = 职业

 

We usually say “the vacation” or “my vacation.”

 

“Will start” is OK but it’s common to just say “’start.”

 

We don’t usually say that holidays are “meaningful” so I’m not sure what you mean here.

 

We could say “the view from there””or “the scenery there,” whichever you wanted to say.

 

“Cats and dogs” is an idiom, which means the form never changes.

 

“At the same time” usually means simultaneously (同时1发生2的).  “While” generally means “’during the time which.”’ (当 ... 的时候)

 

“Luckily” is used in this way by some Americans, but it’s actually not correct grammar. It’s an adverb and you need an adjective here.       

 

No need to say “final winner” because a win is always final.

 

“Besides” is often used in the wrong way by Chinese students.  It can have two meanings, 除…以外 or此外.  The meaning here is more like the latter.

 

“Long queue” is correct but most Americans would say “’long lines.”

 

We wouldn’t say a long line is ‘boring.”  We could say, “I got tired of waiting in long lines.”

 

Using “right and wise” together sounds a little redundant. One is enough.

 

“Continue working hard” or “keep studying hard” sounds more natural than using “again.” 

End of this summer holiday

Today is my last day of this summer vocation .the class is starting on next Monday ,which means I still have two more days to enjoy,I will leave for school tomorrow anyway.The holiday isn't a long one but it is meaningful.I went to the Huangshan  .The view there is really beyond comparison.However ,it rained dog and cat  the day we climbed the mountain and we all got wet.At the same time , we even had a basketball match with the local residents .Luckily, we were the final winner which was really unforgettable.Besides,I went to the EXPO twice but the long queue there was boring .So I went to some case pavilions instead of the Country pavilions and it proved to be a right and wise decision.
Now the new semester is coming and I have to work hard again.It is bound to be tough but I am sure I will make it.See you next time.

End of this summer holiday

Today is my last day of this summer vacation. Although class will start next Monday, which means I still have two more days to enjoy, I will leave to school tomorrow anyways.The holiday isn't a long one but it is meaningful. I went to Huangshan Mountain. The view there is really beyond comparison. However, the day we climbed the mountain it rained cats and dogs and we all got wet. At the same time, we had a basketball match with the local residents. Luckily, we were the winners which is really unforgettable. Besides that, I went to the EXPO twice but the long queue there was boring so I went to some case pavilions instead of the Country pavilions and it proved to be a right and wise decision.
Now the new semester is coming and I have to work hard again. It is bound to be tough but I am sure I will make it. See you next time.