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I really love my sister I have a sister,she is three years younger than me .I graduated from high school,She graduated from junior high school. Today,I take her to go to a party.The party will spend 5 hours.When the party held two hours of time,She told me, her friends call her out.I agreed it, but I asked her to come back early, and I take my mobile phone to her.(She has no mobile phone). An hour had passed,She didn't come back.I borrowed a friend's mobile phone to call her.But her mobile phone shutdown.I am very anxious,We will hold a party in the place far from home, she a person simply can not go back. But now I can't find her.I left the party in advance.And then looked for her everywhere. Finally, I find her in a game hall . "YuanYuan,you are my sister,You don't know how much I love you. I don't want any accidents on you. "I said to my sister

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I really love my sister

I have a sister and she is three years younger than me._I just graduated from high school, and she just graduated from junior high school.
Today I took her to go to a party._The party will was spend 5 hours long._When the party held two hours of time, After two hours into the party she told me her friends call asked her to go out._I okayed it, but I asked her to come back early, and I gave her my mobile phone to her.(She has no mobile phone).
After an hour had passed she still hadn't didn't come back._ So I borrowed a friend's mobile phone to call her, but her mobile phone shutoff._I was very anxious. We will hold a This party was in the at a place far from home, and she a person simply can not go back. simply could not go back alone.
But now I can't find her._I left the party early in advance, and then looked for her everywhere but I couldn't find her. Finally, I found her in the game hall.
"YuanYuan,_you are my sister,_you don't know how much I love you. I don't want any accidents to happen to on you." I said to my sister.

 

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I really love my sister

I have a sister, she is three years younger than me I am. I have just graduated from high school, she has just graduated from junior high school.


Today, I take took her to go to a party. The party will spend would take 5 hours. When the party held two hours of time At the end of second hour, she told me her friends called her out. I agreed it, but and I asked told her to come back early, and  then I take took out my mobile phone to and gave her (She has had no mobile phone).


An hour had passed, she didn't come back. I borrowed a friend's mobile phone to call her, but her mobile phone was shutdown power off. I am was very anxious, we will hold were holding a party in the a place far away from home, she a person simply can could not go back by herself. 

 

But now At that time I can't find coulnd't see her. I left the party in advance ahead of time, and then looked for her everywhere. Finally, I find found her in a game hall.

 

"YuanYuan, you are my sister, you don't know how much I love you. I don't want any accidents happen on you." I said to my sister.

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