electricity demanded in England
Electricity is one the most important power that we human consume every day.In England the way that people use it can be divided into four main parts.
More than 50 percent power is used for heating room and water. And this part becomes the biggest consuming. The second most of consuming of electricity is ovens, kettles and washing machines, which reaches 17.5 percent. Lighting, TV and radio are considered as one part, and another one includes vacuum cleaners, food mixers and electric tools. Either of them occupies 15 percent n the statistic of the using of electricity.
These daily demand for electricity is much different between Winter and Summer. Typically, it is about twenty thousand units of electricity demanded in Summer,which is only a half compared with in Winter. It is even over forty thousand later 6 pm on each day in Winter.
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eElectricity dDemanded in England
Electricity is one the most important power that we human consume every day. In England, the way that people use it can may be divided into four main parts.
More than 50 percent power is used for heating room and water. And this part becomes the biggest consuming. [Implied, no need to mention...anything over 50% will be the largest consumption. No need to repeat].
The second most of consuming largest consumption of electricity is ovens, kettles and washing machines, which reaches 17.5 percent.
Trailing in third and fouth place, Llighting, TV and radio ties, with vacuum cleaners, food mixers and electric tools at 15%, respectively. Either of them occupies 15 percent n the statistic of the using of electricity.
These daily demand for electricity is much different between Winter and Summer . Typically, it is about twenty thousand units of electricity demanded in Summer,which is only a half compared with in Winter [good observation]. It is even [unnecessary filler word that adds nothing to the connotation of the thought] over forty thousand later 6 pm on each day in Winter.
(This is my first trying on ielts writing. Hope italki friends help me correct it.)
**FYI: I am blocked from writing you personally.**
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eElectricity dDemanded in England
Electricity is one the most important power that we human consume every day.In England, the way that people use it can may be divided into four main parts.
More than 50 percent power is used for heating room and water. And this part becomes the biggest consuming. [Implied, no need to mention...anything over 50% will be the largest consumption. No need to repeat].
The second most of consuming largest consumption of electricity is ovens, kettles and washing machines, which reaches 17.5 percent.
Trailing in third and fouth place, Llighting, TV and radio ties, with vacuum cleaners, food mixers and electric tools at 15%, respectively. Either of them occupies 15 percent n the statistic of the using of electricity.
These daily demand for electricity is much different between Winter and Summer . Typically, it is about twenty thousand units of electricity demanded in Summer,which is only a half compared with in Winter [good observation]. It is even [unnecessary filler word that adds nothing to the connotation of the thought] over forty thousand later 6 pm on each day in Winter.
(This is my first trying on ielts writing. Hope italki friends help me correct it.)
**FYI: I am blocked from writing you personally.**
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