Corrections · 2
This is well written and expresses a great deal of maturity. If I were editing it for publication, I would make the following changes:
Paragraph 1: making yourself hurt - hurting yourself / Comma after "In fact," / and exercise it. - and exercise them. / to bossy - to be bossy / remove quotes from "warnings" /
Paragraph 2: sheep's clothing - sheeps' clothing / The semi-colon is falling into disuse in American English. When used, it separates two complete sentences with the second being strongly related to the first. I use it, but sparingly.
Paragraph 3: artiste -artists / people do have - people have / perceive yourself - perceive you / held your head - hold your head / you brain - your brain / Whatever it is - Whatever it is, / do things right, / do things right. /
Paragraph 4: takes care / take care /
Hope this helps.
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