A Nice Journey in Changdao China This morning,there were two warm-hearted teachers who amended my composition.I was encouraged for learning English by them.I think I won't feel lonely in studying. My

A Nice Journey (trip) to Changdao, China.

This morning, there were two warm-hearted teachers who amended my composition. I was encouraged to learn English by them. I think I won't feel lonely in my study.

My journey (trip) to Changdao was over, the other day. It was very nice. I've grown up inland, so I was eager to see the ocean all the time. The ocean (sea) there was limpid and sky-blue .People were friendly and virtuous.The landlady of the hostel ~~borrowed~~ lent her bicycle to us. I liked the feeling of riding a bike with my boyfriend on an isle where nobody knew us. It was awesome! (wonderful!)
I 'll remember this journey (trip), the sea and the people there.

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WOW!! Sounds Great!!

- was it "sea" or "ocean"??
- I have underlined a few expressions. These parts are grammatically correct and quite undestandable. However, if I were you, I would have preferred some other words or expressions. For Example:

** the phrase "the other day" in this context doesn't sound too good. Instead, it should be a definite day / date.(for example, yesterday, or day before yesterday). It's not that you go to Changdao frequently or every day. In fact, this is your maiden (first) trip to the sea.
Anyway, let's continue......

1. I was encouraged to learn English by them = They encouraged me to study English.

2. journey is usually a one-way travel or movement. If I say, "My journey to Taiyuan from DaLian" it refers to my travel from DaLian to Taiyuan....and the event ends the moment I reach Taiyuan. But, here in your narration, I presume that you are already back from your trip to Changdao. You went there, had a good time and now you are back to your home. Is it so? If yes, then instead of "journey", you can use "visit" or "trip". It sounds more appropriate.

3. awesome : Nothing wrong with this word. However, I woud have preferred a milder word like "wonderful", may be....
For example, we often say:
'I had a wonderful feeling.'
but,
'The awesome beauty of the vast ocean amazed me'.
"Awesome" literally means something that generates 'awe' or 'reverence' in one's mind.

4. My journey (trip) to Changdao was over, the other day = The other day, I came back (returned) from my trip to Changdao.

It's always wise to stick to one tense (past) when you are talking about the past.....unless absolutely necessary to switch to present at times.
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Nice Composition!!
BTW, Can you tell me where exactly is Changdao? In which province????

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