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First notebook entry: Introducing myself I'am Rita.It's my pleasure to be here to communicate with others who are also want learn more about English.I'am a colledge student now.My major is director of film or TV show.I often read books and travel in my spare time.I enjoy going to KTV with my friends,in another word,I like singing pop songs. The happiness I get from having hobbies can help me release the pressure of my life. I'd like to learn more about English here becuase controling a foreign language is very useful and I think my English is not pretty good.On the other hand,I want to pass IELTS this year,so I will work hard here.

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First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I'am Rita. It's my pleasure to be here to communicate with others who are also want to learn more about English. I'am a colledge student now. My major is Direction of Films and TV Shows. I often read books and travel in my spare time.I enjoy going to KTV with my friends, in other words, I like singing pop songs.

The happiness I get from having hobbies can helps me release the pressure (stress) in my life.
I'd like to learn more about English here becuase controling to have better control over a foreign language is very useful and I think my English is not pretty quite good. At the same time, I also want to pass IELTS this year, so I should work hard here.

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** your English is quite nice. Don't worry for the corrections. I prefer to recommend MINIMUM corrections to keep you interested in the study of English.

- Spoken (Oral ) English often permits certain expressions which look a bit odd in Written English.
for example:
If you are talking to a person and say  "On the other hand, I also want to pass IELTS", it doesn't sound odd at all. It doesn't hamper your conversation in any way.
However, the correct expression in this context should be "At the same time, I also want to .......". 
-So, when you are writing something down, please take special care of each and every expression as much as you can....
-In Oral English fluency and 'power of communication' is important while in Writing perfection matters most.
- In Oral English, we even use body-language (e.g : 'a shrug of shoulder' or 'certain gestures with hand') to bridge the gap whenever we run out of words or expressions. It is common even with 80% native speakers. It seems to be an involuntary reaction.
-But, can we use a 'shrug of shoulder' while writing something?? We just can't!!. ...We have to dig deep in our stock of words and fish out the correct expression or word while writing something.
-So, now you see the difference between Oral and Written English. I am sure if you stay alert while writing something, you can always make it perfect.

Just go with the flow, and have fun with English. ^^

** BTW, I love singing in KTV too!!! Had tons of happy memories in KTV with students in China. Enjoy!! ^^

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First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I'm Rita. It's my pleasure to be here to communicate with others who are also want learn more about English. I'm a college student at the moment. My major is director of film or TV show Film and TV. I often read books and travel in my spare time. I enjoy going to the KTV with my friends - in another words, I like singing pop songs.

The happiness I get from having hobbies can helps me release the pressures of in my life.
I'd like to learn more about English here because controling handling a foreign language is very useful and I think my English is not pretty very good. On the other hand Also, I want to pass IELTS this year, so I will work hard here.

Hi Rita!  Don't worry about the corrections too much, this is quite good.

- using an apostrophe indicates letters are omitted, so always "I'm" for "I am".
- important: a space after punctuation marks.  If there's no space after commas and full stops, we don't see the punctuation.
- "I'm a college student now" sounds like it newly happened.  "At the moment" means this is a temporary situation.
- the acronym KTV is not commonly known; we simply call it "karaoke".
- "in other words" is the common expression.  Other = alternative/something else, another = one more/something extra.
- "the pressure of my life" means your entire existence is painful! "The pressures in my life" means the problems are only a small part of your life.
- "controlling" indicates a use of power, sometimes negatively; "handling" sounds more genial.
- the phrase "pretty good" is only for positive statements.
- "on the other hand" introduces an opposing idea.  But you're giving your reasons for studying English, so "also" is all you need.

Hope that helps! ^^
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First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I'm Rita.It's my pleasure to be here to communicate with others who are also want learn more about English.I'am a colledge student now.My major is
director of film or TV show.I often read books and travel in my spare time.I enjoy going to KTV with my friends,in another word,I like singing pop songs.
The happiness I get from having hobbies can help me release the pressure of my life.
I'd like to learn more about English here becuase controling a foreign language is very useful and I think my English is not very well.On the other hand,I want to pass IELTS this year,so I will work hard here.

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