Victory parade
Road closed today in my city, because tanks drove through the city...
This is a victory parade, the memory of World War II. These memories are very hard for many people...
But today it's very beautiful and exciting spectacle. When the tanks go by the earth shakes, when firing the gun, buzzing in the ears...
It was really great!!
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Victory parade
Roads were closed today in Moscow, because tanks were driving through the city...
This is the victory parade,in memory of World War II. These memories are very hard (difficult) for many people...
But today it's a very beautiful and exciting spectacle. When the tanks go by the earth shakes; when the guns are firing, there's a buzzing in the ears...
It was really great!!
You wrote the second paragraph in the present tense. It works OK, but you could have used the past to match the rest of your piece:
"But today it's was very beautiful and exciting spectacle. When the tanks went by the earth shook; when the guns were firing, there was a buzzing in the ears..."
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may god bless all those who lost their lives in war
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if u would also mantion here your city's name then much better to understand to every one... enjoy these moment............,,,,,,
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Victory parade
Road was closed today in my city, because tanks drove through the city...
This is a victory parade,in honor the memory of World War II. These memories are very hard for many people...
But today it's very beautiful and exciting spectacle. When the tanks went go by, the earth shakes was shaking. when firing the gun, the sound was buzzing in the ear...
It was really great!!
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