Would anyone check my grammar mistakes?THx a lot.Part 2
It's ok if you don't know Chinese,I just need your help in English.Thx a lot.
霍克思的译著实现了自己的目标。他对中国古典文字的精通,对英文音韵修辞的把握,加之辛勤不辍的努力,使他得以跨越文化的界线,将这部18世纪的巨作以通俗、易接受的方式传达给英文受众。对我来说,拜读他的英文译作是一个享受。
Hawkes achieved his goals. His mastery of classical Chinese,rhyme of English, and his hard efforts, enabled him to deliver the masterwork of 18th century to British eyes and minds in its original flavour cross cultural boundaries. Reading his English translation is a great enjoyment for me .
我尤为喜欢先生翻译的开篇诗――好了歌。这首诗代表着全书的中心思想,但是,只有到故事结尾的时候,当生长于富贵之家的宝玉从锦衣玉食沦落到了‘围破毡’、 ‘噎酸齑’的境地时,当他终于意识到人生的欢乐如梦一般稍纵即逝之际,全诗的含义才表露无遗。先生将诗译得很到位,意、韵均佳。下面引几行:
世人都晓神仙好,惟有功名忘不了!
古今将相在何方?荒冢一堆草没了。
Extraordinarily,I appreciate the translation of the opening poem which contained the main idea of this novel.But the central theme starkly shown up only at the end of the story, as Baoyu reduced from a sumptuous lifestyle to a penniless and frustrated outcast,and realized the joy of life is like a dream. Hawkes did a beautiful job in translating this poem.Let me give a quote:
"Men all know that salvation should be won,
But with ambition won't have done, have done."
"Where are the famous ones of days gone by?
In grassy graves they lie now, every one."
当然,先生也不是圆满无暇的。他对“红”字的处理就受到批评。中文中“红”寓意人生最美好的事物,比如青春、爱情、财富、高贵,营造着贯穿全书的意境。但先生为书名选择了《石头记》,放弃了“红”字,他还将“怡红院”译为House of Green Delight (少怡宅)。
Mr.Hawkes is not perfect,of course. His translation of the "red" word processing was criticized. "Red" in Chinese means the best things of one's life, such as youth, love,fortune, dignity, and it also builds the artistic conception throughout the masterwork.Giving up the "red" word,Mr. Hawks Chosed "The Story of the Stone"for the title,and he also translate "yi-hong courtyard" as "House of Green Delight".
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以真面目示人? ? ? 你言过了吧!!!
我今天下午才换的头像啊!!!
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那我必然比他好啊。你为什么不以真面目示人??
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Oh, sorry, maybe you are good look than him , ahahha...
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你是说的黄西吗?I don't think I look like him.
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By the way , do you know Joe Wong, you look so alike .
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