Paleontology

Hello everybody! Could you please correct the following TOEFL essay?

The passage states that woolly mammoths became extinct due to the climate change and overhunting by predators and provides three reasons. However, the professor refutes each of these reasons.

First, the passage says that warming the earth global warming caused problems for mammoths as they had been insulated with thick wool to be protected them against frigid weather. The professor denies this, explaining that there is no evidence suggesting that warming the earth global warming has caused their extinction. The mammoths could have moved to the poles as their skeletons have been found at areas close to the poles.

Second, the passage mentions that mammoths were had been hunted by animals. Again the professor counters this, saying that there were not any predators animals for mammoths. She says that sober-toothed tigers were at the same size of the today’s lions, but their teeth were one third as strong as one third those of the lions. So, they couldn’t frequently have frequently hunted mammoths.

Finally, the passage states that mammoths were had been overhunted by human tribes. However, the professor refutes this, saying that we cannot judge mammoths were had been hunted by human the tribes just because knowing we know that wandering human tribes were good at hunting. They could have hunted Buffalos buffalo and Beers bear that were easier to hunt.

Although the passage states that mammoths became extinct by the combination of climate change and over hunting overhunting, the professor believes that this hypothesis has a lot of problems and it is hard to believe it.

I tried to be as correct as possible, but I think I am subject to some mistakes.

The passage states that woolly mammoths became extinct due to climate change and overhunting by predators and gives three reasons. However, the professor refutes each of these reasons.

First, the passage says that global warming caused problems for mammoths as they were insulated with thick wool to protect them against frigid weather. The professor denies this, explaining that there is no evidence to suggest that global warming caused their extinction. The mammoths could have moved to the poles as their skeletons have been found at areas close to the poles.

Second, the passage mentions that mammoths were hunted by animals. Again the professor counters this, saying that there were not any predator animals for mammoths. She says that sabre- toothed tigers were the same size as today’s lions, but their teeth were one third as strong as the lions’. So, they couldn’t have hunted mammoths frequently.  

Finally, the passage states that mammoths were overhunted by human tribes. However, the professor refutes this, saying that we cannot judge mammoths were hunted by human tribes just because we know that wandering human tribes were good at hunting. They could have hunted Buffalos and Bears that were easier to hunt.

Although the passage states that mammoths became extinct by a combination of climate change and over hunting, the professor believes that this hypothesis has a lot of problems and it is hard to believe it.

You have used the word ‘passage’ again. In your other article I replaced it with ‘article.’ A short piece of writing, in a newspaper or magazine is called an article. A short section of writing taken from a much longer piece can be called a passage. This might be correct if your whole book is a series of discussions between the professor and another person.

‘Global warming’ is the accepted phrase to describe the warming of the Earth because od climate change.

‘Frigid weather’ is awkward, you need another phrase: ‘very cold weather’ or ‘freezing weather.’

Sabre – toothed:  a sabre is a weapon; like a sword. The tigers had teeth like sabres.

(Ah, in America it is spelt saber)

Sober = not intoxicated!

Lions’ ….plural possessive. …as the lions’ (teeth).