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I Want To (But I Cant)
Dear Miss M,
I want to be a man that can cheer you up when you are in sadness. But I can't do that because I am afraid that I would hurt your feelings if I take any action. I am not a shy-type of man but when you are in front of me, my lips are just like a tough ice that cannot be break.
Maybe it is because you are special to me. Your face can stop my mind from to controlling itself. It's awesome! However, I still cant help you or be by your side because of my "mind-set". I am afraid and extremely shy of you.
Sorry Miss M,
Maybe next time when I see you again, we will have a special conversation. I hope I can be the man that will always be by your side.
I want to (but I can't)
Here are why apostrophes are important. Definitions of "cant": http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/cant
Dear Miss M,
I want to be the man who can cheer you up when you are in sadness. Yet I can't do that because I am afraid that I would hurt your feelings if I took any action. I am not a shy-type man but when you are in front of me, my lips are just like a tough ice that cannot be broken.
Maybe it is because you are special to me. Your face can stop my mind to control myself. (This makes no sense. What do you mean?) It's awesome! However, I still can't help you or be by your side because of my mindset. I am afraid and extremely shy of you.
Sorry Miss M,
Maybe next time when I see you again, we will have a special conversation. I hope I can be the man that will always be by your side.
Grammar notes aside... dude, really? Really?? I hope this is just a writing exercise.
If you are shy about Miss M, then this is the silliest thing you could do (I am speaking from years of experience here). Would any sane woman be interested in a guy who is afraid of her? If just being near her is a drama, then ask yourself: who would tolerate a person like that?
This is not the movies; this is reality. What humans want is a sense that things are OK. Shyness? Frozen lips? Wishes of forever from someone who is afraid of you? Forget it. No-one wants that. You wouldn't want it either. If you want to play up this drama (without Miss M's agreement, I should remind you), then brace yourself for failure.
Do you want success? Then just chill out. Yes, it's really that simple.
Sorry for the rant. I've seen this too often and I'm tired of watching decent guys bang their heads against walls for no reason. Good luck.
I want (but i can't)
Dear Miss M,
I want to be a man that can cheer you up when you are in sadness. But I can't do that because I am afraid that I would might hurt your feelings if I take any action. I am not a shy-type man but when you are in front of me, my lips just like a tough ice that cannot be break.
Maybe it is because you are special to me. Your face can stop my mind to control myself. It's awesome! However, I still can't help you or be by your side because of my "mind-set". I am afraid and extremely shy of you.
Sorry Miss M,
Maybe next time when I saw see you again, we will have a special conversation. Hope I can be the man that always be by your side.
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