It Was Not Like That
When I was a kid I used to go there.
I used to go to my heaven.
I used to sing songs there.
I used to run there .
I used to smell it's lovely flowers.
I used to touch it's soil.
and I used to lay on It's rocks.
but now I only can cry and let my tears fall down when I go there :(
Yes look how your silly works destroy one's heaven.
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I'm sorry to hear that your small paradise have been totally destroyed.. :(
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Yosra Sadly I have no picture of that when it was beautiful and can not describe it through words.
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@Jenny Hi .It is a place next to my home and oh! no my English is not good at all. But your sentneces really make hops in my heart . Maybe one day I can write in English very well :)))
Thanks so so much for your lovely comment and correcting the mistake I made .
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What was this place exactly? :\
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Powerful poem! Where was this photo taken?
It feels foolish to write you a correction but I will so that your English is perfect. :)
The only error I see is your use of the word it's
(it's soil, it's flowers, and it's rocks.)
it's with an apostrophe (') is a shortened word for it is. So you're saying "it is soil, it is flowers" (etc.) It's a common mistake that native speakers make as well.
You would write it "its"
Normally apostrophes are used to make a noun possessive (like this is John's shoe, the dog's bone, etc.) It is an exception to the rule. :)
I do love your poem, though. Thank you for sharing it. :)
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