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First notebook entry: Introducing myself
Hello everybody:
I am a new student.I wish be friend with everybody here.
I:height 170cm,weight 58kg,long and black hair...
Like sports outdoor,climbing,hiking,tourism,nature...
Like reading,danceing,listen music...
I am interested in strange things .
I am cheerful ,love laugh,like making friends...
I want to understand different amorous of country...
Suggestions:
1. What kind of new student are you? College Student? Graduate Student? Other? Say more clearly. Example:
"I am a new student." --> "I am a freshman in college."
2. "I wish to be friend with everybody here." --> "I hope to make many friends here."
3. I:height.... --> "I am 170cm tall, weigh 58kg and have long, black hair."
4. Like sports outdoor... --> "I enjoy outdoor sports like climbing & hiking. I also enjoy being a tourist and enjoy nature."
5. danceing -> dancing
6. listen to music -> listening to music
7. "I am interested in strange things." --> "I am interested in diverse things" or "I have diverse interests"
8. love laugh --> love to laugh
9. This sentence is not clear: "I want to understand different amorous of country"
I will guess that what you mean to say is, "I want to better understand the wonders of different countries".
I hope this helps! :)
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