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Please help me!
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Tet holiday was out of from today. <Today is the last day of Tet.>
I will start with new targets and my efforts. <As of today, I will start working on my new goals.>
I set them the end of last year. [you don't need this line since you are talking about your NEW goals]
This year, I will try to spend time for physical exercise. <...spend more time doing physical exercise>
I get older. My health become worsen. <As I get older, my health becomes worse (worsens).>
Having the good health, I can work hard, earn more maney, enjoy more. <Having/Enjoying good health, I can,,,and enjoy life more>
Today my internet was suddenly trouble. <... my Internet broke down>
I called to the internet center. Luckily, they helped me quickly. <I called the Internet Center and luckily, they helped me quickly.>
If none, I wouldn't have had the internet connection to chat and write in my diary. <Otherwise, I wouldn't have had the internet connection to chat ....>
According to buddhism, from after the 4th day of the New Year, my ancestors aren't in my home. <According to Buddhism, after the 4th day of the New Year, the ancestors aren't at home any longer.>
As a result, we no longer offer many bunches of incense on my altar. <As a result, we no longer burn insence in our family altars>
[Your three lines about your Internet connection breaking down are a little off since you are talking about TET... you may conclude your entry with them, but they are still a bit out of place!]
Good luck with your writing!
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