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A new start Now it’s the beginning of 2012 in China’s lunar calendar. As us expected, we had a wonderful time. Nowadays, with the rapid development of society, people are too busy with their work. Therefore, the spring festival always means the only time for family reunion. Last year, my grandpa suddenly passed away, just on that moment, I realized the essential meaning of family. We youngsters are using today for tomorrow, we seldom looking back during the pursuing journey. But the cruelty is, we usually lost something when we gain something. This seemingly paradox make me confused. Since it is a new start, I want to tell myself keeping moving forward. What’s more, cherish every second of family time. Hoping all of us can rewrite the new chapter of life.

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" Nowadays, with the rapid development of society, means that people are too busy with their work" This sentence seems lacking of subject,so I remove" means that",is it right?
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A new start

Now it’s the beginning of 2012 in China’s lunar calendar and as expected, we had a wonderful time. Nowadays, with the rapid development of society, people are too busy with their work.
Therefore, the spring festival is alwaysthe only time for family reunion. Last year, my grandpa suddenly passed away, just at that moment, I realized the true meaning of family. We youngsters are  always living for tomorrow, we seldom looking back while  we pursue our lives. But the cruel thing is, we usually lose something when we gain something. This evident paradox makes me confused. Since it is a new start, I want to tell myself to keep on moving forward and cherish every second of family time. I Hope all of us can rewrite the new chapter of life.

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A new start

Now it’s the beginning of 2012 in China’s lunar calendar and as us  expected, we had a wonderful time. Nowadays, with the rapid development of society, means that people are too busy with their work.
Therefore, the spring festival is always means the only time for family reunion. Last year, my grandpa suddenly passed away, just on at that moment, I realized the essential 1. meaning of family. We youngsters are using today for always living for tomorrow, we seldom looking back during the pursuing journey  whilst we pursue our lives. But the cruelty cruel thing is, we usually lose something when we gain something. This evident paradox makes me confused. Since it is a new start, I want to tell myself to keeping moving 2. forward. What’s more, and cherish every second of family time. I Hope all of us can rewrite the new chapter of life.

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1. Better vocabulary would be "true", ie the true meaning of life is to love your friends and family

2. Never use the gerund with two consecutive verbs ie. I keep having/keep on having the same problem NOT I keeping having

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