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could you give me some suggestions about this composition As is vivdly depicted in the picture,with the speedy social and economic development,the number of something has dramatically increased\shrunk.(discribe picture).At the lower part of it,we can see several Chinese characters which read… The purpose of the picture is to show us that due attention has to be paid to … .Owing to … , …..(discribe picture )If we let this situation go as it is,we don’t know where….will be in the forthcoming future.By that time,it would be a tragedy of immeasurable proportions. Accordingly,in my opinion,confronted with the problem ,we should find several solutions immediately.For one thing,we should appeal to the authorities to make strict laws and regulations to control … ;For another,we should cultivate the awareness that…is vital to us.As a consequence of successful publicity and unwavering government support,I reckon that we humans can surmount this difficulty and a brilliant future is awaiting for us if we exert every effort to it.

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As is clearly illustrated in the picture, due to speedy social and economic development, the number of something has dramatically increased\decreased.(describe picture). At the bottom (in this lower area, as can be seen here - assuming you are pointing at the picture) ,we can see several Chinese characters which translate to…
The purpose of the/this picture is to show us that due attention has/must to be paid to … .Owing to … , …..(describe picture )If we let this situation remain unchecked (If we don't attempt to change the status quo),we don’t know where….will be in the forthcoming (<-tautology) future.By that time,it would be/result in a tragedy of immeasurable proportions.


Accordingly,in my opinion,Confronted with the problem, I propose we should find several solutions immediately. Firstly, we should appeal to the authorities to make/enact strict laws and regulations to control … ;Secondly, we should cultivate the/public awareness that…is/will be vital to us the cause/achieving ""/furtherance of a goal.As a consequence of successful publicity and unwavering government support,I reckon believe that we humans humanity can surmount/overcome this difficulty and a brilliant future is awaiting for us if we exert every effort to it.

 

Actually the entire last sentence should rephrased.(this one isn't perfect either though)

As a result of our successful public awareness campaign and unwavering government support, I believe that, if we exert every possible effort, humanity can overcome this hurdle and and create a brilliant future.

 

Hopes this helps or gives you some ideas. Good luck with your presentation if you're doing one.

 

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