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An Application Letter Dear Human Resources Manager, I have followed your company with considerable interest for some time. Recently I read from the website http://www.gx-job.com that your department has vacancies. I was so excited and cherished this opportunity. That is why I am writing to you here. Although I am not majoring in Human Resources Management, my compulsory courses include it indeed, however. I really hope that I can put the theory into practice and this is the very chance for me. During the past two years, I have been sharpening up my skills through all kinds of internship and part-time jobs. I reaped lots of benefits from it since it not only consolidates my knowledge but also fostered my sense of responsibility. I always take pleasure to embrace challenge. Obviously this is a position where I can continue to grow and learn. I believe I will live up to your expectations with my passion and dedication. Furthermore, I am available to begin work after December30, 2011 and enough working hours per week can be guaranteed. The following is a copy of my resume and I have also included it as an attachment. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward very much to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Xiaofang

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It's very good.  Pay attention to vocabulary; I would not use the word "cherish" to discribe a job opportunity unless it were the best dream job in the world or president of the USA.  "courses include it indeed, however" you structured this a little awkwardly, can you fix it?  Your letter stresses how you feel about the job which is important but as a boss I would be very interested in what you could bring to the company regarding skills, capabilities and competence which you touched on well.  What would make you a successful candidate for any position.  Those are the only things I can say which are points to consider correcting; the letter is very good.  Good luck!  My Skype:  brian.madden4  

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